I watch your hair fly in the wind.
I stare in your eyes,
And feel your soul
Like a warm embrace.
I watch the sun set.
I hold your hand,
And feel the soft touch
Like a gentle lovers kiss.
If only this
Was not a dream.
Have I lost my mind?
Yes.
I lost my mind
The moment I saw heaven,
In your eyes.
Why can't you love me?
Why can't we live this dream?
I love you.
I can't stop.
Though I lie for you
To see your smile,
I cannot for me.
It hurts every moment I'm away,
When I see you, and cannot be with you,
And I near perish at the thought
Of never seeing you again.
Will time change us?
I would wait endless eternities
For one moment of your love.
I did not ask for this pain,
But now, I cannot live without it,
Without you.
Please understand.
I love you.
Author notes
A reason
my reason to live
A contest entry
- ~~~PREWRITE CONTEST~~~ by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended September 2, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Pain That Love Brings by Sesheta.
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I like this one to... can i borrow this hahaha....lol !!!!
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I liked this poem again.
This poem i don't know while I read it I sensed a begging, a pleading, an honest man speaking and it was quite wonderful. you have amazing talent.
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I love this, it would've been such a shame to DQ this. The message of you and your lover and how you feel about them is so great.
"If only this
Were not a dream.
Have I lost my mind?
Yes.
I lost my mind
The moment I saw heaven,
In your eyes."
Such beautiful words spoken there. I love it.
Great write and good luck.
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please read the rules, or else im going to have to DQ you.
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i think im missing something i reread the rules and i cant see where im in error could you let me know what im doing wrong so i can fix it
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AWESOME-POEM
I Love It!!! You R So Rite!! I Could Actually Feel Your Poem Too..Wonderful-Write,Indeed-O! It Brought Some Tears' To My Eyes Too, Some Sad, And some Happy...Keep Up The Great Work...I Can't Explain The Depth Of Love-Intensity, Pain, And Emotion, In This Poem, But I really Loved it!!.'God Bless You In Every Way'.Love, Your Friend, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo...
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This is a very sweet write which is full of longing and love that ebbs and flows as feelings deep inside..i like the tenderf feeling of this write..almost felt like sitting in a corner and contemplating!
Thanks for entering and good luck
luv
pri
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amazing.....i dont have any other words to describe how i feel after reading this.
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This is immensely beautiful. It takes my breath completely away. It is also immensely personal, it knows what makes the heart beat faster. Scripted for the heart. I like the way your poem as a heart opens to the songs of love, every moment you cherish, every moment in pursuit of the first breath. A poem filled with candlelight, sunsets, flowers, stars, moonlight on lakes, cricket symphonies, warm wind, swaying trees, lush gardens, fierce devotion, true love. You hear whispers, you receive kisses. True love is the deepest thing in life.. it is deeper even than reality so you can imagine your dreams coming true. Mine always do Longing is like loving the other like a lover loves. I tell this to my husband - And longer than there have been stars up in the heaven, not as beautiful as you, i have been in love with you. This is the best poem i read in a long time. Wish to give you 50 applauses.
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OK, this is like I just looked in a mirror and saw myself saying these words. This is fantastic! You read my heart and soul with this one!
Best of luck in this contest!!!!
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