- Paranoia's Thunder -

Flashing gods boom in numinous projections,
phantom demons lying in the mind's mirages
surging their charges of whispered barbs
into the pulse;
paranoia's thunder shakes in the pearled innocence
as eve of one's conscience awaits the dreaded storms.

Struck by the crooked fingers of awakening,
coma of shrouded presumptions clears
walking awkward in the startled scars of profound;
flame of revelatory strike
creates a fire in the soul

and dreams become celestial weather's gold.

Author notes

Thought to try abstract...first time
for everything...

In a list

- Ascension into Afterthoughts - [Fledgling Words] • next in list

A contest entry

For top poets in "Poetic Challenge" round 5 (bonus round) by luckynsincere. 600 points, ended August 24, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think

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DK akaLunaticSerene
August 24, 2007
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Beautiful words my friend! An expectation I hold whenever I click your links, and congrats to you!
luckynsincere
August 24, 2007

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Nice... very nice A first time for everything? you seemed to do this as if you have always done this/// I love it.

You are as always impressive!

Mel
Whoochi
August 23, 2007

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Exemplary....your ich-filled imagery is just breathless...I did find this lingering in my mind....well done! Miss you my good soul....
Ktulu Blackwolfe
August 21, 2007

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flame of revelatory strike
creates a fire in the soul

I loved this line...

Good luck in the contest.

**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
soulfultia
August 21, 2007

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Once again an outstanding penning. Your imagery is as always fabulous and your metaphors are outstanding as well. I love your work...I do, I do!! Can't wait to read more! ~Tia
JeannieD Hunter
August 19, 2007

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What strong images you have created with this write. It made me think of being in the middle of a meteor storm and finally seeing a way clear. Well done. Good luck on the contest.

Jeannie
HaleyMary
August 19, 2007

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Powerful write. This made me think of nature. I liked the last three lines the best. It made me think of lightning striking the ground. Very all-around beautiful write. Wonderful imagery in this piece. Best of luck in the contest.
StarEyes
August 19, 2007

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Holy Smokes Girl!! What a read this one is! You certainly are on a roll tonight! Best of luck in this contest!!!!

and much love

Nettie
penman
August 19, 2007

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Excellent
Oh my precious, you sure boomed with this one! Wonderful visual and creative. Best of luck in the challenge.