I sit at the waters edge, looking out upon the glassy expanse,
Mind numbingly flat, towards the horizon it looks at a glance,
But, restless it lays, dancing about with its strong flow,
My feet dangle, off the cliff face, the deepening water below,
I stand, my fragile body, to look over the azure glass,
Wind caressing my body, and my toes deep in the emerald grass,
The expanse of water compromising my thoughts, and soul,
Chilling my mind, cleansing my soul, I feel as if we are one: as whole,
Reaching out, I want to live, with this liquid - that completes me,
Falling over the cliff, my hand out stretched, this is my plea,
For life and happiness, I want to complete: myself: my dreams,
As I hit the water, I die: as it seems,
A dream enfolds around my dying senses,
The water and I, have joined souls, with all lost defenses,
In a list
A contest entry
- waterfalls by starwing.
600 points, ended August 24, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great rhythm -- I like the way its ebb and flow enhances the water imagery.
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thats lovely to read. well done!
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I like the imagery, well done.
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dream enfolds around my dying senses - love the line!
The imagery has a certainty and self. Love the way you used waterfalls as an inspiration.
Indeed will go in finalist.
Thanks so much for sharing and entering in my contest. I wish you all the best. Keep writing my friend.
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Lovely imagery and such feelings rush over me as I read this. I can see why you won the gold trophy! Take care and keep writing...
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i'm not into dark and sad...but this did catch my attention. there are a few glaring grammatical errors...but a nice balance and effort...i actually felt it ended to soon! peaceand harmony...desi
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