softly,
softly,
fingertips,
brushing errant strands
from o’er hypnotic eyes
rose petal skin quivers
beneath feathered touch
cupping gently,
palms to jaw,
thumbs caressing blushing cheeks
heartbeat quickening,
sensual energy
passed electrically through glistening pores
inhale deeply of scented hair,
intoxicating aroma
in silky, floral essence
weighted eyelids sink lower,
soft moans
escape from within
thought lost in
delicious amnesia,
will controlled by the body’s desires
slowly,
as tinder,
passions ignite
fires released in a sensual kiss...
Author notes
Poem by Bedroom Eyes
In a list
A contest entry
- Soul Kissed ~ (Sensual Writes Only) by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended August 25, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TONS OF OPTIONS!!! Please enter and give it a try, I want a lot more entries! by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended September 7, 2007, 63 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites that dont suck. by parachute fog.
400 points, ended October 20, 2007, 93 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *~Watching Paint Dry~* G-400, S-300, B-200, HM-2 people by Oktobere Sahnge.
900 points, ended December 15, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round 1 of Cindy's Rounds Contest :) Give me your best PW !!.. by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
800 points, ended December 15, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - your best work composed over the last twelve months by Lute.
600 points, ended January 9, 2008, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Very Easy !!! by Loveandblessings2u.
1000 points, ended April 28, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gimmie somthing that doesn't suck. by Predaw.
460 points, ended October 27, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one; your best prewrite. by August Starlight.
765 points, ended March 21, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sensually Yours by jul.
700 points, ended April 2, 24 entries
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650 points, ended April 20, 417 entries
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1000 points, ended August 13, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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the starting gently to release soft moans.... makes me want to grab someone to kiss... ummmm.. now that i look around here, i changed my mind. maybe later when i go out. lol
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Wonderful and beautiful poem. I really love this poem. I just can picture myself 
doing this. Also congratulation on your trophies too. You really got me into your poem too. I hope you do wonderful in my contest and thanks for entering too. 
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Such beautifully sensual words deserve more trophies than you've been awarded. Your poem touched a chord.
Margaret
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gotta say, my heart quickened a bit as i pictured the words, just allowing my body's desires to control my will.. whew. nicely done. i can see why the trophies are there.
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Wow! I really enjoyed this one. Thanks for entering the contest and for sharing this with us. Best wishes to you and good luck
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i love theway this is written
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Congrats on all the trophies.
Interesting form, and beautiful words.
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Wow this was a brilliant write.
Full of sensual imagery and lingering words
that stick with you long after being read.
Thanks for sharing & best of luck -
I am glad to see so much praise for this. It's wonderfully structured and very atmospheric and powerful. Well done
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That is one of the best poems I have ever seen and I can tell you that it truely describes a moment when you are caught up in love
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soft loving kisses
this is just awesome
you are an artist
with your sensual
way of writing
congrats on all
the trophies this has won
from a friend
called Riftkin
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Alrighty~then,
very sexy little piece you have here,
very, very nicely done.
I love the style of this piece,
great flow, very enjoyable.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
good luck in my contest. -
Greg~
Well deserving of the Gold, silver and honorable trophies this has won. I think that's all I'll say right now.
Congratulations Hon
Much Love & Many Blessings~
~Joy -
content 7.3
vocabulary 10
accuracy 7.6
creativity 7.4
theme 7.3
originality 7
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I like how you have structured te poem, the strength behind each and every line
Passionate soft imagery
I loved the ending
Thank you and Good Luck
Cindy
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Whooshidle... =]
~Overall:
On to the next.
Lysander
<3
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this is so cool
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This very sensual has a nice flow...love the imagery here...speaks to me;
thank you and Good Luck in the contest.
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excellent poem congrats on all the trophys and good luck in this contest
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This piece is beautifully sensual, though it isn't short, it ends just at the point where the reader's own heartbeat has quickened, though this is maybe a good thing to leave the rest to the readers imagination.
Good write and congrats on silver.
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why does this sound so damn familiar? I think I've read this before. Well if I had it was worth re reading and if I haven't then this is some weird dejavu. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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This is....exquisite
Makes me envision such a night with the man I love
To share a night like this would be nothing short of awesome...
the rest of my thoughts I will keep to myself for now...
Well done!!!!!
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This has a very heartbeat feel to it. The words seem to beat on their own, it really is interesting.
Some of the phrases I have seen before, but at the same time it is difficult to find all things unique. I would have prefered a bit of word varying but again, that is because some lines almost seem redundant.
I will admit to being overly critical right now, with that said, this is a good piece. Its soft and has almost this heavenly feel to it.
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very sensual and descriptive. I like the passion you showed here. Beautifully captured images. thanks for sharing and congrats on your wins.
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Mmm, this is beautiful. You captured the moment in word perfectly, with each sensation preserved. Wonderful work!
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Wow, that was incredible. I love poems about the romance of sex, not just lust. The beginning repition demands the reader's attention from the very start, and the imagery just flows with the diction so well. I loved it. I wish I had more time to comment!
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This is love at it's best, what a wonderful way to convey all those ignited moments we all feel when love is at its peak. I love the word choice in this piece. Glorius
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
Wow this was amazingly sensual, if that makes sense lol. Your words are so passionate and so real. You described this so well with great imagery. I really liked these lines "heartbeat quickening,
sensual energy
passed electrically through glistening pores
inhale deeply of scented hair,
intoxicating aroma
in silky, floral essence" Best of luck and thanks for entering
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oh wow!
This poem made me hold onto the suspense as I kept reading through. Such beauty yet not too dramatic or else it would have sounded cheap. but this pieace was brilliant!
I actually got into this "love" mode then I snapped out of it.
oh! makes me wonder how my first kiss would be lol!
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Woah.
Give me a moment to breathe.
Wow. Wow . Wow. This was absolutely beautiful (and that is an understatement!) I love this. Oh my. I absolutely adore this piece.
Your words are perfect- I love the imagery, the depth, the beauty in every single word you have written. This is the best write I have read in ages!
Sigh- I wonder if anyone is going to kiss me soon
This was so...amazing. Brilliant!
Congratulations on your gold- you deserved it. I think I would have done something really drastic if you hadn't got that gold because this was more than just perfect. Mind blowing!
Love love love this. Going into my bookmarks. This was my favourite poem from you. So wonderful!
Your talent is just a.m.a.z.i.n.g! So honoured to have you one my faves.
Beautiful! Great job
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Real pasionate a vapor of sensuality comes out from my skin... I feel as though i am drifting between a kiss from the kiss with you and her. It is indeed beautiful what is happeneing here. The imagery is soft like a white rose petal.
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BREATH TAKING
Breath taking is all I can say!!...Hanging from every line!Can I have my breath back now?
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vey passionate 3 FINGER SNAP
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That is so pretty
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Very vivid imagery. I really liked this piece. I could see the image you were painting so clearly in my minds eye. Heck, I wished I was living it! LOL
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Beautifull
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This flows
I love the flow of this work as it meanders and drifts along like a lazy river that wanders through life refreshing and soothing all that it touches. this is great stuff and a dream to read to myself
Terry
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steamy and well written. i enjoyed myself keep up the good work.
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I really liked the imagery in this poem. =) You're quite talented!!
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this is aazing
i only started writing poetry but i doubt i'll ever write something this good -
Sexy
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Its amazing how spacing can create such a perfect picture,I love to read poetry where I can get involved in, so thank you for waking up my sences and leaving me breathlessly in need of a sensual kiss...
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Go halainn! xxxxx
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wooowwww what a kiss It must have bin in the name too
and I see it was even worth the Gold
Thnxs for sharing...
XXJeannette
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wow, amazing!
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woah im speachless this is amazing dont change a thing its perfect just like the kiss it describes applauses dont cover it
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it is so good!! i swear to you i got tingles up and down my spine
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AMAAAAZinnngggggg
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No Comments, huh....??Hmmm....
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Gorgeous piece you have penned here! So very well expressed, and the detail here is extraordinary! Beautiful in every sense of the word!
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You have taken my breath away now all I can do is sit here and stare at your lovely poem Wow this was just awesome dear!
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Jeff just in case ya didn't know, Bedroom Eyes is all man
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Wow! Just plain beautiful!!!!!!!
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Very Good. I like the details. I feel the emotions. This is beatuifully writin. Very good. Keep up the good work!
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wow.I'm speechless.
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This is really good! Keep up the good work!
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What beauty you have written about a perfect kiss
if only i had found someone and shared such a bliss
but thus i have not and it sometimes makes me sad
but there is still hope and its keeps me rather glad
You poem is delightful, a lovely treat to read
Penned so elegantly with truth the form made so neat
Keep on writing till ur inspiration comes to end
I really love your poem so much my talented friend
~♥Silky♥~
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Sweetly Written
You have penned a beautiful poem of the perfect kiss. I think any kiss witrh the one you love has ghot to be perfect. Nothing quite like the beautiful feelings when you kiss the one you love. Such a warm and lovely poem. You take care, Sandy
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Beatuifully written. The imagery is wonderfully vivid and captured so well. It is sensually romantic with a touch of eroticism, just enough to make fan the flames of desire. I enjoyed reading this write. Well deserving of the gold. Great work.
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totally beautiful
& completelyyyyyy deserving of that gold!
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Gold indeed!
My hat is off to the judge for seeing the quality here.
Like a pearl necklace, each verse is beautiful in itself, but the two that captivate me the most are at the end:
"thought lost in
delicious amnesia,
will controlled by the body’s desires
slowly,
as tinder,
passions ignite
fires released in a sensual kiss..."
Exquisite and fresh word blending!
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woo woo what on earth was that i was shivering with exitment,how do you do it. i will never be able to write like it was very sinful but very very WELL! i am not saying more ,,,fab fab fab .please read my poetry i need more critics.
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hey I beieve this really works. A very descriptive realistic picture envisaged. Keep it going I like this.Kind regards.
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jeez, work it up why don't you^^ no wonder you got a gold. the suspense and passion was beautiful and strong in here. i am very impressed^^i hope the inspiration was as lovely as you writing.
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Excellent Work!!!
Congrats on the Gold!!!! This was a wonderful piece, and well done considering that it describes a kiss!! -
Worthy
It flows just like the stemmed tides of a sensual kiss
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So understandably GOLD
I look at the comments on this and realise I am in the presence of greatness. You have affected sooo many with this beautiful poem. And you must be one heck of a kisser.
Exquisitely done.
Buddy -
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I give it my best shot lol.
Thanks for the great comment
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I'm tempted to say something but I think I will just whistle a song and keep on walking passed
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Very Good Poem
I Thought Your Poem Ws Very Well Written, and Expressed..It Is Also Deep With Emotion..OOOOHHHH, Loved It!! Great Write.'God Bless'.Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo....................................
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First of all I have to admit I must have read this piece at least fifty times since you have entered. Yes it has drawn me back that much and that often.
Secondly, the flow of this piece is stunning and that is putting it mildly. I love the sensuality that lies within every line. Two full minutes of reading and you have described, in my opinion, one of the most simplest acts but at the same time one of the most meaningful acts of love with such depth, detail, desire, and passion. This piece makes it very hard for the reader to imagine anything less than that one moment in which leads to the most perfect kiss releasing a euphoria that is comparable to none other.
This by far is one of your most indepth, sensual, loving, stunning, elegant and passionate writes I have had the honor and pleasure to indulge within. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
PS
I want a kiss like this,
where can I sign up for one?
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wow, very well written, I liked the layout, it represents to me the slow descent into passion. wonderful.
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really good
That was awesome. It was almost like it was happening to you when you read it. It is totally the way I picture the perfect kiss ever. -
really good
so sensual, mesmerizing
very enchanting
i am captured by your verse
what is really a moment
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This was amazing I could see it fell it wow you have very amazing talent This is very good
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Hmm a wonderful sensuous kiss in certainties Exquisitely written. Love the format of your poem and the pauses in between. You walk us step by step enraptured. Love the images of cupping gently the jaw, eyes hypnotic, scented hair, moans and delicious amnesia ouff a lot of significance and approval in this precious kiss. Very smooth, an unembarassed lavishness.. Reminds me my first kiss with my tender half. This poem has an unusual beauty, a lot of caring and exceptional love. I am so inspired to write now!
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This is amazing.
The words and adjectives and metaphors were outstanding, and you portrayed this image perfectly.
I had a movie playing in my mind.
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this is amazing....wow it captures the essence of a perfect kiss. i think about having a kiss as perfect as this all the time. you are a very talented writer. this has become one of my favorite poems
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brilliant poem amazing volcab and imagery good luck in the contest you have entered xx
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I really like the format that you've used to deliver this piece, some wonderful and unique expressions...very smooth. Soft, tender, each word a brush stroke to the mind...teasing the senses. Really enjoyed this.
Bella
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Liked the creative use of space you have in this poem - the flow and the alliteration throughout these lines. Sensual indeed - vivid visuals - a long kiss, that takes one to other places. Fitting entry for this contest -
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Could close my eyes and almost feel this.....very sensual and cannot think of a better description of how a kiss should be....well done..best of luck! Love that line..." thought lost in delicious amnesia" thats extraordinary!
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Your words touched my soul with a soft and tender kiss. So beautiful, so gloriously sensual.
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WOW
Wow! Im not sure what I can say, I know my comment will never convey how brilliant this is and how cuaght up I was in the moment. The layout of the poem really helps adds to it. The thoughts are coming out one by one but they all string together smoothly.
"passed electrically through glistening pores" I adore this image, I can honestly never say that I have even seen anyone relate to pores and it works so well!
The last line is magic, I love how you describe it "slowly, as tinder" Its just so fantastic
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awesome
i liked it alot
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nice flow, man! every detail a studied recollection of true and experienced passion. favorite moments: softly,
softly,
fingertips,
brushing errant strands
from o’er hypnotic eyes
rose petal skin quivers
beneath feathered touch; passed electrically through glistening pores; weighted eyelids sink lower; thought lost in delicious amnesia. wonderful expression...excellent write.
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Oh sweetie this was simply fabulous.
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why do i have to be the asshole who points out that you mistyped "tender"? oh well, at least it's a constructive comment.
it amazes me to see someone playing with the text itself! your poem flows like a waterfall of the best kind of lust...(let's call a spade a spade here)
simply wonderful!
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I appreciate you pointing that out, but if you refer to the 24th line, it is meant as "tinder" for igniting passion's flames
I DO appreciate the critique though, and thank you for reading!
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well done
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wow
this was great. love it.
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Beautiful
It put me in mind of a tender moment that would be forever etched in two lovers mind as if it was aparting kiss. My favorite line is cupping gentlely so much tenderness is shown that you can sense that this isn't a casual act. It makes me think of soulmate whos connection couldn't be broken.
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wonderful feels like a loving kiss to me this had a lovely flow to great writng flawless, best of luck of luck in this contest
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The symplicity is devine.
Exquisately done. emotionly I could feel the tenderness in this poem. It is very easy to read and I wouldn't change anything about it. The feelings are expressed so tastefully It is just beautiful. My favorite part is the first verse. Although I enjoyed everything about this poem. The title expresses this poem just right. The first line draws you in and the last line is a powerful ending. I really liked this.
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This was so powerfuly written!! And it's a perfect description! My heart is beating fast now, for that is exactly how I felt!
GREAT POEM
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Very nicely done . Very sweet.
Great job on this piece!
~Lisa~
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amazing........delicately passionate......wonderfully crafted.....a fine piece of poetry!!!!
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a mix of creativity, sensuality and rhythem. Nicely written, different vocabulary and very artistically presented. Keep it up.
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