I feel on cloud nine as my heart skips a beat
He's the star in the night as I drift off to sleep
The sun in the morning of a bright new day
Just thinking about him chases the clouds away
He's the static charge that rushes through my veins
The breeze that I feel brushing across my face
The rain that falls as it kisses my skin
Oh, If only he knew how he makes me whole
He's a beautiful rainbow that's captured my soul
A contest entry
- Secret admirer by Mykeee.
850 points, ended August 31, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Photo Inspired (Rain, Love, Nature, Beaches, The Moon, Sunsets, etc....) by Sally the Ragdoll.
600 points, ended September 23, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice! I liked the ending lines:
"Oh, If only he knew how he makes me whole
He's a beautiful rainbow that's captured my soul".
Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest!
-Sally -
Superb
Well, having read it Sugar, this is obviously about somebody who is admired and loved. Actually it is wonderful. The flow and everything, the emotion is superb. It is wonderful.
Wayne.
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This is a beauty! So many tender and loving expressions, melodic and magical. Very nicely done. Best of luck in this contest!
Bella
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SOMEWHERE OVER THE RAINBOW YOUR SECRET ADMIRER WAITS FOR YOU!
Oh my -I wonder who this lucky guy - could be - for it is easy to see that you admire your secret admirer - and wish to unravel all of his sweet and sensual secret - even if you have to remove every item of his clothing to do so, Baby! GOOD LUCK in the contest - and THANK YOU 'SO MUCH' for shring this magical and emotional piece with me.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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Beautiful...yes, I love it and hope you win plus more on the contest.
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He's the static charge that rushes through my veins
The breeze that I feel brushing across my face
He's the rain that I feel as it kisses my skin
Oh, If only he knew how he makes me whole
He's a beautiful rainbow that's captured my soul
this was passionate and beautiful i really like this good luck jewels
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wonderful poem Good luck in the contest Sis
Beautiful Sis so who is he, This secret admirer hehehe I like this piece very much thank you for sending it to me. Love LISA
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Nice - It seemed so bright and innocent. All the natural elements went well and great ending. ~ Mykee
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