Nothing in the world could be
as kind as April in the morn
when day reborn
returns to sky.
Passion builds and then climaxes,
she and I beneath the sky.
A million dreams and every future
grow and blossom
in her smile.
Stay with me my lovely April!
Stay and linger for a while!
Author notes
This is for the POY contest.
A contest entry
- The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1709 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 1509 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Feel free to re enter the contest, but I am DQing you on account of you obviously did not read the rules.
Next time, please be sure to follow them. -
Okay so I was sooooooo wrong!
the poy is accepting PW so please re-enter...and read ALL the rules...lol
thanks!
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Aloha!
The POY contest is still being edited...but no PW will be allowed...creative fresh writes only...and not to be in any other contests, until POY is over...
Thanks...please try again
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Liked the gentle romanticism of this, it's a huge contrast to Eliot's April is the cruellest month... I know you're using April as a person but I like the ambiguity suggested by the use of name. 'when day reborn/returns to sky' is such a beautiful line, I loved it! Also liked the way it shifted from an almost lyrical mood to something slightly more physical and the imagery is extremely evocative. Great use of personification too. Thanks for sharing, it's good to read of some love for a change. Cheers.
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This puts a genuine spring in your step and reminds us that in only a few weeks it will be April - a really pleasant poem,thank you.
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Very Nice
Romantic and beautiful. Well written as well as technically perfect. This is a charming refreshing piece. Blessings. d
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Nicely put, well written with poetic flare. The poem has a message and delivers it well. This reads as a love poem with sensual overtones. Your poem say a lot with little wording and that is hard to do. A very moving and heart felt poem, thought provoking yet gentle.
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What a beautiful poem. I love the spring. Great work
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Excellent
April showers bring spring flowers
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this was really beautiful...great job...i really go love spring time...though i'm much more of a fall girl myself
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Awh this is such a sweet poem.
I hope your "lovely April" does stay with you -
Sounds like this is about more than the month of April. Liked the sentiments expressed so well in these lines, the flow and the ending. Stay and linger for a while - time for another round perhaps? Easy to say things in a few lines too, rather than running on at the bit for many lines that say nothing more. Liked the brevity of this poem and the visuals they bring to mind - a few welcome memories as well.
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