in the third place
where he she tried
to love for each
other and in the first
place love for God
where two would be
a child or job
should two proceed
flipping back between
two or three or one
and four? family four?
family of four
what's a family for?
what of your mother
your brother sister
father farther
from your Father
your wife
child
job
juggle
4132 today
1324 tomorrow
2134 thereafter
if two is flexible
A contest entry
- making a statement by Mystikrypton.
400 points, ended August 22, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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1=God
2=child/job (the thing you have to do that takes up all the time)
3=husband/wife
4=Family
It's about priorities -- the frequency with which they run our lives -- not in order, but each day to day it's own sequence. It also illustrates why it can be so difficult to maintain a relationship. God being what should be first, 2 being what we usually focus on or feel we need to focus on, 3 the one that suffers the most and 4 where we don't really know where to put it most times. -
Very unique - interestingly written. I really liked the alliterations and how they were practically tongue-twisters; it definitely added to the piece. However, I will admit that I'm quite confused by it. It all went by so fast with me having nearly any time at all to take in what you were trying to say. That may simply be my own fault, who knows. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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