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Last Dawn

I can feel the chill morning breeze whispering
As I watch the sun barely visible upon the horizon
A deep red glow surrounds the cloudy sky
I can taste the moisture in the air rain is coming

This day though not great and possibly my last
Is still better than facing the darkness to come
I can hear the distant thunder as it heralds the dawn
My time here is slowing down soon to come to a close

I can see the bright flash of lightening lance down
Soon the sun will fade thunder will cease clouds will join
And time will release a heavy sorrow of my passing
This disease has taken its toll leaving my body drawn
My strength is failing my will upon the wind in tatters
Least I get to see the dawn one more time before I go
To where I do not really know as I let my eyes close
In an eternal sleep peace etched deeply into my still face.

By Kindredblood

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How I'd like to leave life, watching the last dawn storm, the words felt right to me, but possible not enough breaks,

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  • Dragons Lady
    August 19, 2007

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    This is perfect as it is (my opinion). A wonderful way to pass away watching as the dawn breaks and the storm clouds roll in. I love the imagery made so vivid by your words. Well done.


  • moon2u
    August 19, 2007

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    ABSOLUTLY BEAUTIFUL

    GOOD MORNING KINDRED
    I HAVE TO TELL YOU I WOULD NOT MIND LEAVING IN THIS FASHION....THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL
    AND I LOVE YOUR WRITING
    HUGS MOONY