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Sanguine afternoon
the bees stunned by the power
of saturating perfume,
the sky frowning gray and
finally shaking its wet head,
misting my garden.
Rapturous moments
in the clouds,
heart and fingers
for heaven.
Drops fall
and gently touch my tongue
waiting to taste
the voice of God.
"This is the blood of Christ,"
the priest said,
as he handed me the wine...
But this afternoon
amid the gray,
there were no thorns
upon his crown,
no sorrows in his cup,
only his joys came raining down.
Author notes
Written September 14th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Take me to a beautiful place by Yellow-Rose.
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Absolutely beautiful. I loved it. Thanks for you entry
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I love tasting the raindrops too! This poem is truly a memorable song of nature.
Krishna -
I love that you mingled the rain with this spiritual poem because everytime it rains, it feels spiritual to me indeed~~ and that you brought the two together this way was inspiring
Deeply beautiful this was~~ what wonderful writing
~~Dawn
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This is such a feel-good-rain-poem... so inspirational and soothing actually.
Always enjoy reading you... just beautiful :-)
~ Wendy -
Did you ever read any secular accounts of Jesus? (as opposed to the Biblical ones?) I read one once, it described him physicaly as having wavy hair, and a beard that forked, and gray eyes. It said that he commanded the crowds when he spoke, and that he had been seen to become angry, and also that he smiled, but never laughed.
Your poem is peaceful, and very spiritual. I think it is the way Jesus would want to be remembered, instead of nailed to a stake wearing a thorny crown.
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sometimes the quiet, spiritual moments are all we have to hold on to - the rain can be cleansing, if we are willing to listen and be purified as it falls from the heavens - I close my eyes and envision the coming storm and it is beautiful - incredibly moving work, brian
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Oh Joyce this ends so peacefuly and beautiful a nice write my friend:) Seeing the refreshment in the rain seeking to find yourself uplifted
Hugs 
Sherry
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7.5/10
Errors
None that seem apparent to me.
Overview
Don't really like the gray background with this piece, I don't feel it accentuates it in any way.
Opinion
Second Jesus poem in a row I've read, but, that is ok. A good piece that you have written here.
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