he was the black cat moan
back in fourty-three
stringin' with sleepy john
and junior
travelin' highway 61
for dimes and half-pints
of juke smoke and sweat
but before that
he was in memphis
workin' for mr. dixon
tossin' cotton bales
for dimes and half-pints
on mississppi queens
he don't play anymore
but
that don't mean he can't
the blues just ain't blue
in detroit
Author notes
MuddyKing
A contest entry
- ABSOLUTELY ANYTHING!!!!! I SWEAR! by Cherokee.
300 points, ended September 23, 2007, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I missed this one somehow..excellent penning, you are strummin some serious blues these days, so fine.
Congratulations!
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Okay... now that you have judged your amazing contest, I can tell you what I really think of this poem. You always do well in my contests because I just adore everything you write. Our souls seem to gravitate toward similar things. But I didn't want to look like a kiss up. So, now maybe, when I drool over this poem, everyone will know I am not one.
This poem kicks ass! It honestly is one of my favorites I have ever read on here from start to finish. I was so excited when you put it in here. So there. It makes me want to grab my guitar and start playin' somethin'.
And, of course, I know that Mississippi Queen is a riverboat. I just like the song Mississippi Queen about the slut. lol
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I like how this is a little story.
Good atmosphere.
Thank you for your entry,
Good luck. -
Excellent story you tell. You make the reader envision this poem...I could almost hear the blues playing in the background. Enjoyed!
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excellent use of the contest theme, love this...
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Livin Life
He was the dice, and life had a hand at him. Funny how we tumble for the gamble of life...becoming odds.. in other lives..the win or loss. I liked this a lot.
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You held me from the opening line. I was particularly partial to "black cat moan" since I recently watched Black Snake Moan.
Excellent, as always.
Best wishes in the contest.
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Wow. absolute perfection!
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