Don't leave destiny within the hands of chance,
no longer be imprisoned by circumstance,
unburn all the bridges you once set ablaze,
return all malice into the distant haze.
Open up your heart to loves bouquets,
bathe your soul in the warmth of its rays,
reflect upon a past now fleeting,
accept the fact your mind is reeling.
Present a glass towards the ceiling,
freedom found is a joyous feeling,
satisfied, now that truth is unmasked,
with answers to questions never asked.
Profound revelations, a time phase now marked,
future uncertain, yet renewed faith is sparked,
take control of your own fate, you choose the dance,
don't leave destiny within the hands of chance.
Author notes
Written in Tet Zayin form: Tet Zayin is Hebrew for 16 and as such the poem is composed of 4 quatrains (4 line stanzas) stanzas 1 and 4 contain 4 lines each of 11 syllables, stanzas 2 and 3 contain 4 lines each of 9 syllables.
Rhyming scheme is as follows:
Aabb bbcc ccdd ddaA as first line of stanza 1 and last line of stanza 4 are exactly the same.
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What a wonderful poem and rhyming scheme! It flowed very lyrically and I especially loved the fact that nothing seemed forced. Your message is so sunny in this, it made me want to go out and do something positive.
"don't leave destiny within the hands of chance."
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this is so wonderful
i felt so joyful, energetic and full of hope reading your hope inspiring poem, one regains faith and know that life doesnt stop at periods when one feels down. i will be reading it over and over again and i will unburn the bridges i once set ablaze my dear.
lovexxxxxx
nermin
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So glad you enjoyed this piece, nice to see you back and actively reading again, I hope you find inspiration to write some more yourself.
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Excellent!
Wow, a very lovely piece of poetry.. Sings with harmony, and we all can use some peace. Awesome job with the form poet... and keep up the wonderful works. Thanks for sharing, peace..
-Timothy aka poeticweaver
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Wow, you have been refiguring some things, the pen is powerful lol
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This is beautiful and thought provoking. Very well done within the guidelines of the form. Your rhyme and meter are on target. You take to this naturally, you have the heart of a poet. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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I am speechless, beautiful with perfect rhyme and syllable count, told you it was easy
I have sent the link to Amera, she will be pleased
Cathy
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Hello my friend. Well first I must say I love this form. I love rhyming schemes and this one is great. And your poem was so uplifting. We must all take control of our own fate. A wonderful closing verse.
I can relate to the words....
Profound revelations, a time phase now marked,
future uncertain, yet renewed faith is sparked,
take control of your own fate, you choose the dance,
don't leave destiny within the hands of chance.
Your poem is so full of good advice. Thank you for sharing with me this morning. I enjoyed reading this. Bless you, Sandy
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Lots of thoughts on how the world is and how it should change the imagery is very clear and presents that overall feeling of many your closing line,
"take control of your own fate, you choose the dance,
don't leave destiny within the hands of chance. "
Should leave everyone with some food for thought, It is in our hands to change things,
Thank you for sharing,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz
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wow well written
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