A boy sits alone
His thoughts whisperin’
He’s remembering all the good times
Him and his boy had
He tastes a snowflake
Cries tears
And says
‘I’m going to love you ‘til the end’
He sings to the world
All about him
Drags a stick through the snow
He writes inside a heart
I
Love
You
‘Til death do we part’
He lifts his head to the sky
And he asks as tears fall
‘Why did you have to take him?
Didn’t I love him enough?
Is that why you made him go?’
He kneels down in the snow
Whispers ‘I love him so much’
He presses his hand inside the heart
‘I dunno if I can stand never seeing you’
He closes his eyes
Turns to go
And what he doesn’t see
Is the ‘I love you too’
Under the heart
Written in the snow
Author notes
The end...i tried to make the end work...but i don't like it.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love this one. Great job. I can to the following verses:
He kneels down in the snow
Whispers ‘I love him so much’
He presses his hand inside the heart
‘I dunno if I can stand never seeing you’
as for the ending, I'm not sure. I always seem to have trouble figuring out my endings. Great Job. keep it up
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wow i freaken love this!! like wow! your an amazing writer, now i'm jealous of you =]
theradreak -
OMFG.
That is sweet and it sounds fine.
Awwwww. That made me cry tommy. Blargh.
2nd time in one day. That's really cute.
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