I wish upon a star
Daddy
I sit here in our special place
Gazing up at the stars
That you’ve shown me and
I still wish
I wish
I could hold you
Even just one more time and
Tell you that I love you
I wish
I could hear your gentle voice
Telling me a bed time story
Making me feel safe and special
I wish
I knew why you had gone to war and
why you never came back
like you promised
I wish
I had the chance to tell you that
I did not mean what I said when you left
But I do I LOVE YOU with all of my heart
In a list
A contest entry
- ~Quickie Contest~ When You Wish Upon A Star.... by Nature Song.
590 points, ended August 21, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful write well done
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Passionate Knight....how moving and how touching...I had a Daddy before I was born but he did not have to go overseas..He was in the Intelligence Corps.But your poem touched my heart...we who have had parents who served, all have this bond...Their service, and how it affected us..Thank your for sharing !
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This is so amazing, brought me to tears.
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Ed:
This is a very touching piece, and I felt it to the core, because when my daughters were small, they would wish like the child in your piece, that their Daddy come back home safe and sound and soon!
A very good read, thank you for sharing with me on this site.....
Be blessed with love and light always.....
Forever, Tanya
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if i may, call ye knight?
i've been wishin' on so many stars, i am fortunate enough to stll 'ave mi da', but och, i 'ave lost others. i canna imagen life wi' out mi da' especially as i am a da's lass. knight, here ye touch so many hearts, and pull so many hertstrings. your simple lay, and beguilling words, seem to gi' voice to a wee lass, or mayhap a lad, and weaves such a fragile and tender moment. aye, if wishes were horses...
so glad i poped by,
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This is penned with such strong emotions. I wish you the best of luck in this contest Ed
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This poem touches the heart and I'm sure there are many military people who would know how real this story line is. There must be so many children that wait for their dad's to come home from war, thinking that maybe they shouldn't have said what they did before their dad's left and welcome the chance to tell them they are really loved. This applies to many other situations in life too. Great sentiments and a moral for all, I think.
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wow this is really good. you did a really amazing job capturing the feeling.. great job..
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Tear Jerker!
What a read this one is! It is a tear jerker for sure! You did an amazing job at capturing the feeling of a child that is sitting at home waiting for daddy to come back from war, (or mommy) and the rest of the family.
Best of luck in this contest!
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This is so sad and heart breaking. The sadder part is that it holds truth for many children (entire families). An innocent wish from a child. I loved it and it touched my heart. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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VERY SAD
It is so true right now with so many familys it is very sad. Great work
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So beautiful with the innocence of a child. A reminder that we never know when those we love will be taken away from us so we need to tell them what we feel while we can. I do wish you well in the contest.
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To Have A daddy
just like you...would be awesome, life can be cruel to children,Good Job Ed,you penned another beautiful one here as well..SH.....
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If that was written for quickie contest what can you do when you have more time for poetry? Nice and tender poem, sad but full of love.
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BEAUTIFULLY SAD
This is soft and filled with so much emotions...Loneliness through the eyes of a child...Death that is not understood...You are a master poet my friend*hug* thank you so much for sharing:f:f:f
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Ah, yes, I DO like this very much!!
I am delighted to have read this beautiful poem. You know I love your military poetry! and this poem in a child's voice is superb.
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Lovely poem spoken fromthe heart. Makes one realize howmany do die in war. That a childs forgivness is so freely given! Best wishes in this contest ~Sie
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