Word play is like foreplay,
it just might not come
Good intentions may only carry you so far
[flick, flick] the noises
sound better than the format
of my words,
and like havoc,
my fingers work ‘em
A bunch of ideas may not always
. . . . . . . C o n n e c t . . . . . . . . .
But once you're there
pulling out can be too messy
So you continue your rythym
And the tick tock
of the alarm clock
on the night stand is only a reminder
That you’re falling short
And then you’re left with another
Shitty piece.
Author notes
( yes there is a double meaning in this =)
A contest entry
- Make me laugh by lilblueeyesmine1978.
425 points, ended September 20, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITES WELCOME! CAN YOU WRITE AND LAUGH AT YOURSELF TOO? This contest is for you!! by ears2hearyou.
900 points, ended March 1, 2008, 26 entries
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Excellent work Good luck
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That was clever!
and we couldn't help but giggle at the double meanings!
thankyou for your entry dearest poet!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) naughty little poet you are...ooohhh..
that's the sound of the alarm clock!
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Good. thanks for entering and i hope to read more from you soon. good luck in the contest
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your <<< you're
And some capitalized words that shouldn't be capitalized (if you're adhering to grammar).
HAHA, your poem basically describes me 99.9 percent of the time. And it's funny how we still save these pieces.
I-Araxie-I
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I fear this may have a vulgar double entendre lurking within it. I hope so, but I can't be sure. It's that "shitty" bit which might be a hint.
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lol. Ahhh the nights where Im up all night on AP... creative. funny. enjoyable. Really loved reading this piece. thanks for the entry and the laugh.
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This is a very good write, I like the end the best thank you for your entry and the smile. Goodluck in the contest xxx Best wishes
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Oh my, this has a strikign rhythm that simply shows that you know those times that the tick of clock makes for sharp poetry....
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Vry good I love the ending to this it gave me a good laugh. totally excellent!
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