Some one will come while some one depart
That,s the custom and life,s art.
Some have to live while others die
Deads can,t be returned no need to cry
Forget your past,On future u concentrate
Love the goodness and sins to hate.
iN LIFE WHEN A HARDSHIP CAME,JUST FACE IT
AND THE TROUBLE IN YOUR WAY,just embrace it.
As a whole in life u r in a test
For being successful,then try ur best
Work hard for ur destiny to chase
then u will be praised every where as a blaze.
Author notes
this is not too rhythmc poem but a good moral one.
please tell me wat u say about t?is it not mystery of life?
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nice feeling
I liked the feeling and concept of this poem. The flow could be improved by fixing some punctuation
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I love this part for it's something I have yet to atdchieve...
Forget your past,On future u concentrate
Love the goodness and sins to hate.
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Nice work, some wise words there. Very well penned
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Well nice one it is i liked the concept of hope in it. it is lovely though check and edit capital and small letters.May Hall(achi hai or yahan mera yahi name hai is ka mutlab hai hope)
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Ummmm I didn't ask for a rhythmic poem, I asked for a rictameter syllable count as follows 2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2 this does not fit what was requested on the contest page, I'm afraid because you have not followed the rules you are being DQ'd
Karen
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