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In Tune

i.

 

I heard the Sun whispering,
“wake-up,” into the ear of Nature
amid cheerful musical greetings
from avian performers, and

weary creatures stirred

paying homage to first rays of

light.


ii.


A sauntering neighbor with a

grizzly disposition, sniffed the air

as wild blueberries nearby, captured

by a ray of sunshine, shuddered and

coldly accepting their fate, they were

overcame.


iii.


Chattering banter could be heard
as persnickety high-rise purveyors
eager to fill their larders, impatiently
reminded all that their stores

were empty

darkness.


iv.


Further on, where meandering streams

converged, sharing fluid gossip

spindly legged darlings
under adult supervision, timidly
sipped refreshment while

admiring their yearling faces

and all was well.  

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  • xox-emma-xox
    March 29, 2008

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    I love nature poems. This one makes the reader connect with the characters of the poem. very well written. Good luck in all of those contests! I would be very supprised if you did not place first in all of them!
    Check out my poetry! My name is I-Love-Donegal! Don't forget to comment!


  • Nicolette Everett
    November 22, 2007

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    Has an original feeling to it. The nature comes through your poem and makes a good connection with the reader.
    Nice job!


  • Olivias Violin
    November 3, 2007
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    Original!

    and well written! very enjoyable


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 4, 2007

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    This is so serene,I love the calmness of most within this poem,doing away with woodlands create havac on those poor souls,thank you for this well written piece, good luck in our contest..MM

  • ashjoe76
    October 1, 2007

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    very good

    The images are vivid. They stay in our mind long after reading the poem. It shows you are keen observer of life around you. The ability to create pictures through words makes you a true poet. All the best!


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    Chattering banter could be heard
    as persnickety high-rise purveyors
    eager to fill their larders, impatiently
    reminded all that their stores were empty


    this is great
    for it shows a scene


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    So beautifully woven!... Simply stunning and so very descriptive. Thank you so much for your entry, I can see this is going to be hard to judge! Good luck in my contest.

    Shaz xx


  • Dageek2
    August 25, 2007

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    I love your wording and use of personifications. For some reason your mentioning of wild blueberries made me wish I had some right now. Good job and good luck in the contest!


  • Swan song gold member
    August 25, 2007

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    This is an excellent nature poem and I am glad I got to go along. It is well written and well thought out and I will read this again


  • just-a-lonely-girl
    August 25, 2007

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    "Light overcame darkness and all was well"
    great poem! I liked the message you put into it.
    thanks for entering!

    ~kit~

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 19, 2007
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    Ah, very cool message in this poem...it does say something to me, I was thinking it was only the all was well part..LOL....thank you

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 19, 2007
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    This is really good poetry! Very vivid and I like 'persnickety', great word, and I love the ending...and all was well, I loved the children part, this is a great little snippet of your street, and a moment all in a breath of air, thank you so much for this poem

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    This is beautiful Michael, soft and full - and I can truly see this place. Wonderful piece of poetry.

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