I wake up ,wiping the sleepiness from my eyes
Your spirit is with me, i can feel you still
The warmth of you touches.
I walk to the door
Longing looking
Am i still dreaming?
Reality becomes wishes
I wish on stars
I wish at 11:11
I wish for you...
Its lunchtime now ,I am hungry
Your in my head again
We partake lunch together
I eat most of your dessert saving you a bite
So you never shall feel deprived of the taste.
Night falls upon me its slowly gets quiet.
I put on my lavender gown your favorite
pull the curtain back to look again.
longing looking
wiping the hair from my face
I sigh...
Looking at the sky hoping
you are looking at the same sky.
Wishing upon the same star...
A contest entry
- Paint A Picture - ends later tonight by tara wilson.
1200 points, ended August 19, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I like the idea of wishing on the same star, I hope he is too, thanks for this entry
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how sweeeet
Lovely picture of a love that is not with you, and you wondewr if they perhaps share the same star, moon, sky, thoughts the same as you. Easy to let our mind recall time and if we are thought of with love. This was filled with a tendern dose of love, sweeten with memories, that are real and pleasureable. I loved the flow of this, so realistic. I wanted to look out the window as well, to see. Keep penning.
Great poem, sis.
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(= i love the time ll:11.
The lunch part was a sudden jolt (=.
There is a quiet and subtly disturbed sense of longing here, but i am not quite sure if i am right. hmm, somewhat appologetic.
(=, good effort. (=, tighten the lines abit.
Go on youtube to search for namie amuro's "wishing on the same star". It's one of my favourite song.
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