A cold and miserable day,
that's all that it was.
My hooded jacket did little
to keep me dry in the downpour.
I was waiting for the bus,
just like the dozen other people there.
There was nothing to make me stand out.
Nothing to get me noticed.
At least, I didn't think so.
Yet, for some reason,
you stood next to me,
sharing your umbrella.
You never said a word,
and neither did I.
I hardly dared to look at you,
even though I wanted to see your face.
As the bus tarried,
I felt my cheeks grow hotter.
Thank goodness my face
was hidden under my collar.
Finally, the bus arrived.
It was over ten minutes late, I swear.
The crowd pushed ahead of us,
but you remained by my side.
Trailing behind the group,
I climbed up the stairs and paid my fare.
As I pulled off my hood, I looked back...
You weren't there anymore.
I don't know where you went.
Were you just a stranger...
or my guardian angel in disguise?
I really don't know.
All I know for now is,
God was watching over me that day.
It feels a little sad, though...
I just wish I could have thanked you.
Even so, as I stand here in the crowd,
waiting for the bus on another rainy day,
I feel the gentle splashes on my face,
and smile into the sky...
Author notes
[ Prompt: Image ]
I love working with prompts. It's amazing what sort of thing can come from them. ^_^
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A contest entry
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425 points, ended October 9, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this was sooo wonderful !!!!!!!!!!!!
i could just see it as i was reading which not many people can do.... great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YOU ARE MOST DEFINATELY IN MY FINALIST LIST NOW!!!!!
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THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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very nice
very well writtten and so true often we dont expect a helping hand and yet there it is goodluck in contest
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THis is so nice a guardian angel, as you know take care of ones they love,nice flow in this I saw your angel(nice that he was there) good luck in the contest,MM
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I totally agree with kimojuno's comment. Inspirational, beautiful, image filled.
Luv,
Candy
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Wow-wonderfully done and quite an inspirational piece, I love how you got all this from an image! Beautifully done and beautifully written-great job!!
Jeff. -
Very sweet poem with great expression and imagery that I really loved. Truly a wonderful write!
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i started to read this and was amazed at what feeling and words were put into this. it is an amazing poem! on of the best i've seen by far! wonderful job!
ruth -
I was sucked into this freeverse immediately. I felt that there was an immediate tension createdb which was never satisfied because of the twist in your story (he/she/it vanished)
. Rewarded 4
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I so want to know what it saved you from, what it inspired in you....the poem was awesome but I craved to know more.
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excellent expression
I like the way you unfold the story in this poem. Your words create a very enchanted mood, and I also like the spiritual possibilities you conclude the poem with.
Good luck in the contest!
Ethereal One
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"Even so, as I stand here in the crowd,
waiting for the bus on another rainy day,
I feel the gentle splashes on my face,
and smile into the sky..."
This is a lovely penning, Poet...It's reminiscent of the song by The Hollies, "Bus Stop"...Thank you for your kind words on mine...Tell Marg I said hello & I hope all is well in her world...Good luck in the contest...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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