fitting it seem to begin in a dream,
only to awake in darkness,to comprehend
the reality of life at its end
seeing the heart of the matter
of wasted time spent in hollow
places on shallow people.
injustice of an empty mind
to afraid too put forth
the effort at something more.
who am I to want more to be
something better then I am
to allow oneself to continue believing
in us...in me.
how shallow I am to force
dreams of reality faded charms
to the soulless.
free thinking what a joke
from soda to toys sex sales
we listen we act ...we buy
diamonds are forever,to the armless
child who worked the mines to
the poor mother who sold thinking
about gold never seen.
fitting for the world to
continue to dream ,for want
of peace so easy gain through
violent.
a letter to you dear self
to remain true to self
in all your selfish ways
crocodiles tears fang filled
smiles as you die slowly
from acid filled air.
it could have been
different.i could have been better
done more seen more ,dreamt outside
my dreams...just once dear self
we could have lived
Please tell me what you think
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This poem is incredibly thought provoking, and your wisdom is undeniable, this poem is well thought out and constructed, and reaches out futher than I can comprehend with only 17 years of life behind me.
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Throughout time...living life to the fullest
As long as we have life we can strive to do it, this thouht provoking poem opens up doors of long ago for me. Well done, thank you for writing and posting.
All the Best,
Cheryl
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great message
and you know me, i love pieces with great messages! ..a baring of soul piece that really bares it's soul..
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qood i loved it its what im looking for
excellent and qood luck
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Sorry this was already entered into another of my contests and didn't place so I don't think it will this time.
Thanks for entering though
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Wow!! Great write!!
Thnx for entering & best of luck
GloriousGift
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Very deep and heart felt write. Very honest and very true. Well done. Thank you for sharing your words. Love it.
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Once in a while I come across a piece that I simply find excellent..
This just happens to be such a write..
I love that you addressed these issues for yourself and left them open to your readers...
I think we have all said or thought these things at one time or another, perhaps not at all sure of the order they should fall.
Never once have I ever thought of placing them in a letter to myself..
I really enjoyed this write..
Thank you for sharing
Peace
~A~
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I could tell this was written from the depths of your soul..How honest you are in your words and thoughts. I thought all that you said was so true and I am sure made many readers think, including myself.
Soulful Woman
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good job on this thanks for sharing
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thank you stopping by
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you this nice, i love the way of thinking, i like this part in the poem," who am i to want more to be something better then i am." very true, a lot of people don;t know how to accept what they have as their own. no more no less, what you have, what ever it is that's what it supposes to be. great lesons in this piece, i hope a lot of people read it.
love it.
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