I used to follow your every move with my eyes
Trailing behind you like a schoolgirl
I copied your every move
And my feet began to ache from standing in your shoes for so long
But I learned my lesson
After I saw you steal someone else's shoes.
written on 1-12-2007.
A contest entry
- prewrite by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended September 23, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hmm, that is one powerful poem you have written here, with some very strong words and feelings hidden behind those words
I actually loved this, especially because I didn't really saw the ending coming
and a surprise at the end is always great, huh
Well written!
Leander -
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thank you!
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WOW
That is one of the most profound, amazing poems I have ever read....
I am applauding this for sure.
You need to post more of your stuff. =]
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