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Autumn Breeze

The breezes of the wind

  sweep through the landscape,

    as trees wade softly

in its brief caress.

 

A solitary deer grazes

    greedily upon the green grass

  as it watches,

watching for anything.

 

  Yet the hunter breaths softly

    like the Autumn breeze around him.

  Eyeing the deer through his scope,

    he reajusts, and take his aim.

 

The sound is swift and explosive

though hits the target well

after the aspect of warning is possible.

 

  The beast jerks in abject

    pain, brief as lightning hitting the ground,

  and falls to an Autumn earth

    during its last Autumn breeze.

 

 

 

Hunter has prey,

prey has peace,

and the world continues to turn.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I chose the earlier choice. An abstract prompt just entices me more than a concrete one.

This is a Michigan poem I have to admit. If you haven't lived here in this culture than you might see this poem as dark. However, if you have lived up here as long as I have, this is just another piece of the puzzle we call life.

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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    I was not expecting a write like this AT ALL...lol.
    I like it, I personally don't hunt, but I eat meat, so what's the difference, really, and where I am from, a lot of people hunt, so this does not surprise me or shock me,
    but what I do like is this line:
    "and the world continues to turn."
    There is killing all over the world and the world continues to turn, it's so sad.
    I just hope the deer will feed a family.
    The picture you paint here is vivid, and different,
    I don't like that you have used Autumn in your title and then 3 times in the poem, but still, a good poem, thank you for this entry