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Erasing lust,
nectarious cravings unsatisfied,
deepening into her blush
as she mourns,
her lament as a river flows
through twiligth air,
spilling her fragrance
onto the lunar glare
her scented voice,
floats through dusk to dawns
echoing in hollow mind,
that lies in desire,
hoping the soothing voice
shall drift me away
I stare at the liquids,
your face forming before me
those sided facets,
as gleeming silver in luna charms
I hear your soft music,
as a tender whisper rippling,
through the spasms,
staining your crafted face
in your melodies,
I just lie in waiting,
feeling the mistral breaths
that soothing music,
opens wounded heart
as emotion seeps through scarred skin,
your cherry lip caresses me,
as a lover's brush
and I dip my hand,
reaching towards you,
hoping to quench
my heart's thirst
~
Author notes
FREE VERSE
A contest entry
- prompt inspired - closes at ten entries [pif] by Tangled Angle.
400 points, ended August 19, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your best poem ever by Ray Von.
450 points, ended August 26, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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500 points, ended September 3, 2007, 103 entries
Honorable mention
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1300 points, ended September 13, 2007, 103 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Favourite Poem (for prewrites only) by Seeking Peace.
450 points, ended September 8, 2007, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Week-end Quickie, Judge Sunday evening CST, Under 18 only.... by butterflywriter.
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Truly brilliant and beautiful. I loved how you changed the tone: speaker referring to a third person to a second. Brillaint asfand
-Esha♥
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This is a beautiful piece, I do love your wording in places in this piece
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
"that soothing music,
opens wounded heart
as emotion seeps through scarred skin,"
I really love those lines! This is a truly amazing write and I would love to have awarded you something for it, but unfortunately it doesn't follow the rules. I'm sorry! -
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really...how come..
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it has won gold before which I wrote in the rules I didn't want. Again, I'm sorry
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oh!! no problemo! at least u got to read it and commented! so thnx!
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Very beautiful! I love the imagery you have posted here. The voice seems to utter in thy words. Welcome to the preliminary finalist. I will read again.
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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Very beautiful! I love the imagery you have posted here. The voice seems to utter in thy words. Welcome to the preliminary finalist. I will read again.
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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When poems are GREAT. Need I say more?
Thank you for this!!
MAria -
Great Poem!
I really enjoyed this poem, I love the night and moon images that I recieve, and the romantic feel of the poem, it was constructed very thoughtfully and I like that.
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great job
I hear your soft music,
as a tender whisper rippling,
I really lk those lines! Great job! -
Ah. Well, you forgot to put a period after thirst- but not a big deal.
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This was quite nice. Technicalities seem to be perfect in my eyes, a very well written poem. Stellar job. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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