There's always a momentary shudder
when I realize that I'm bitter.
It always chills me when I come to grips
with the fact that I hate myself.
Because I've tried my hardest to resist
feeling inferior,
but I still can't shake this paranoia;
I know I'll never add up to you.
And it's so fucking scary to know that
no matter how close to real I become,
I'll still come second to your facades.
I just know that every bit of perfection in me
will look better in you.
Every shred of beauty I may possess
will somehow shine brighter in your face, because you
are everything I can't bring myself to be.
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Ash-er-mah-leigh.
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 6 by Frodofan.
486 points, ended August 26, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I hate you.
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Good. The one thing I didn't understand was this, "I just know that every bit of perfection in me
will look better in you."
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I just meant that no matter how perfect I could be, this person will fake it... or represent it, better than I do.
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A beauty such as thee I wish would come to me with song I'd serenade and slay a dragon too, I'd fight off all rivals till sword was bent and dull then gather up their heads and place them at your feet and boast of their defeat the heavens I would shake and burst through devils gate if you but smiled at me.
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"And it's so fucking scary to know that
no matter how close to real I become,
I'll still come second to your fascades."
-simply put, but pure genius.
Again, I can relate. *sigh*
Best of luck with everything.
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Wow. Angsty poetry can so often be trite and cliché, but I really identify with, and feel your words.
It's a mindset that I'm working hard to change though, it's really damned hard to be happy...
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Very true, it is hard to be happy.
I guess that's what everyone means when they say that only you can make yourself happy.
Or something like that.
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