M,e,t,a,p,h,o,r,
[no more]
... for dark lyrics dreams
~ misinterpreted~
mind
g
a
m
e
s
~of technicolor scenes ~
[surreal* sweet* hearts* scream*]
w
r
e
c
k
e
d
s
h
i
p
-~-~-s.o.s.~-~-~
b,r,e,a,t,h,e,d,
[back to life]
by...
midnights blip
[...and the lighthouse still shines
on the sands of time ]
*y*e*s*
~ romantic ~
r
e
v
i
v
a
l
~rocked the roll~
dancing
tall
finding
small
.*.*.* clues
*s*e*n*s*u*a*l*
....[intensity's ruse]
YOU
t*e*a*s*e*d
ME
...mmmmm ...you
~side
stepping
through~
c,a,r,e,l,e,s,s w,h,i,s,p,e,r,s,
and...
maybe
...the
next
time
on
the
sea
will
.
.
we..
.
.
be
.
.
[together]
.
.
in
~deeper~
s
h
a
d
e
s
~of~
[Blue]
A contest entry
- TONS OF OPTIONS!!! Please enter and give it a try, I want a lot more entries! by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended September 7, 2007, 63 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty Contest by Innocent Evil.
700 points, ended January 5, 2008, 35 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your Cliche Dirty-Pretty Prewrites!! by danceswsquirrels.
500 points, ended October 13, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - uhh yeah you put poems in and points come out, kool huh?yes by Bleeding On Paper.
400 points, ended October 31, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - D.I.R.T.Y. [p r e t t y] ♥ ConTest ♣ by Kathraina.
490 points, ended March 20, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 300 sound nice by tears.of.silence.
400 points, ended March 24, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this was very well done I liked the way it transcended downward and had a great amount to say. Excellent work and thanks for entering the contest. Best of luck to you. Kahy
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Wow, this is a very stunning piece.
The end took my breath away.
Bravo! -
this.was.awesome.
First attempt at dirty pretty? It was done like a master
well done. Maybe a bit overpunctuated, but that's just personal preference really. I liked your clever word usage and use of alliteration and rhythm. Well penned
~HH
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Incredible !! Whoa, I was in complete awe while reading this. You used dirty-pretty so well in which it just captivates the reader from the very first line. I especially loved:
"~side
stepping
through~
c,a,r,e,l,e,s,s w,h,i,s,p,e,r,s,"
Not really sure why, but they really stood out to me. Amazing write. Thank you so much for entering & best of luck to you ! ♥
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I read it, but can't comment until the option number is in your author's notes !
♥
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really good! i like this one! it goes well with what i likee!!
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i like t good luck in the contest
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4/4/4/5
minus 1
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4
Ooooo... I really enjoyed this! thanks so much for entering!
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This is definately visually stimulating and thought provoking at the same time. In fact I am still thinking about what I just saw and read... I think I have just been sucked out to sea by the undertow. And I am fascinated... Ithica
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~misinterpretational~
mind
g
a
m
e
s
~ technicolor scenes ~
Hit my heart with silver darts, darling. Amazing -
side
stepping
through~
i like this line a lot-it hits a note with me♥ thanx for entering & good luck!
Dead Star--x -
and the lighthouse still shines
on the sands of time
^^those were most definitely my favorite lines! =]] -
Wow.
This is beautiful.
I love the way it rhymes.
It's really different and unusual!
And ships are pretty, like out on the sea. So the imagery in this is amazing. Totally blew me away.
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...also known as shape or concrete poetry, i enjoyed this, it drew mw in as it went along and the changes in pace were acutely and sublimely marked well done...peace
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.*.* pretty (yours are closer must be the font
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I thounght this was great....
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spread out a lot here in the lines, but loved the theme and loved the dirty prettyness of the write, some interesting punctuation pieces here... loved the ones going downwards... tasteful write, nicely done! x x
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OOOOOOO... wow. this is gooood.
I'm not usually a fan for such writes with the emaculant amount of odd text. But you've seemed to suck me right into this.
This is by far one of the best writes I've come across when judging this contest for context.
Thank you!!!
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Wow. Amazing. I love the obscurity. I always love things that you have to explore to understand.
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I usually don't like the whole dirty pretty thing... but you did it very well and your form had a purpose. It wasn't just dirty pretty for the sake of being so. Nicely done.
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woah, you so far are my favourite dirty pretty writer, this is beautiful! I am very surprised that this is your first time at writing dirty pretty because you sound like a complete pro, and I think that it is wonderful that you were inspired to write this from artwork! How could anyone have a favourite part in this, it's so good that they would just have to love the whole thing! well done!
Sleep-N
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WOW, absolutely a wonderful piece you have written. I wish I could pull this off as a first attempt, it was GREAT! I like how you were inspired by artwork, it really shone in your poem. The metaphors were really good, and I loved the ending. For a dirty pretty write, this surely inspired me to write one now Best of luck in my contest, thanks for entering.
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i envy you! i couldn't write do dirty pretty to save my life! i need help with it lol! great write love the metaphors! you have so much talent girly!! share it with me! PLEASE!!! lol once again, great write, great read, good job!
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GOOD WORK
Your first attempt? Who would know?
I loved the poem and while I cannot fully appreciate the form, not being familiar with it, I applaud you and your work. Good luck with this. I hope to read more of your poems soon. PP
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this is fucking wonderful glad i read this
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Uh.
It was good, but a bit much with so much glitter.
Nice job though.
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I think this is wonderfully written. Best of luck in the contest.
Bravo
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i LOVED this one and there's noway I can honestly aplaud you enough. the last few words are incredible and very nicely put together. i love surreal poetry, the world needs more of it
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Interesting. Liked the words, but these "surreal sounds" were a bit much for me ... too many things going on in such a short piece.
Distracted from what would have been a good poem. Less can be more.
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I hate this style, why can't you just say it!? It's a nice poem but trim it down a little. Some of the metaphors are really well put. Good luck.
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