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Trace

She says no
shakes her body yes
screams forced entry.

If she didn't want it
why'd she dress that way?

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  • Nam
    August 26, 2007

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    The other ones better. The last line makes it cliché and really doesn't carry the piece to end it.

    Cliché is sometimes good, it's just how one uses a clichéd line that sets it apart from the rest.