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~ Camouflage Thoughts~




I sat here tapping my cigarettes
as if the sound would appease me,
Your dog tags gently fell between my
finger tips,
Gentle smells of you flowed through the room
from your camouflage shirt that hung from where
you left it,
Candles softly lit the room as I gently touched
the crevasses of your face smiling from the frame,
And I thought of the many nights I sat in the starlight
wishing on the North Star for a happy ending of your
combat filled days,
Wishing the toxic ways of the world would find peace
and tranquility within the diversity the world has
to offer,
And that a whirlwind of rain delivered by a thundercloud
would chase the chaotic state of the world away,
Like liposuction taken never to be seen again,
And we could go back to zero and start all over again
and the only thing the world would be made of is dreams,
As I watch the hue of smoke and I snub the burning ambers of
my cigarette,
I softly shake my head in sorrow and pray for all to have
Godspeed.
( And I remember how I missed you)

Author notes

number 5 words used


cigarettes,
toxic, dog tags
camouflage, combat, zero, thundercloud, rain, dreams, liposuction,



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  • -lk-
    September 8, 2007

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    I can't begin to image the courage it must have taken to endure the time that he was away. The uncertainty and fear must have been overwhelming at times. I admire you so much for the strength that sustained you through the absence.
    This is such a wonderful, introspective piece that paints such a lonely picture in my mind. I was amazed to see that it was composed from a wordbank.
    You did a wonderful job with this and managed to tug the heartstrings with your words, leaving a longing ache deep within~

    Emotionally moving to the point of tears~

    Loved this so much dear poetess


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 1, 2007

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    I really love imagery, and this is full of it! It speaks well of our world, and was beautifully written. You did and Excellent job, thank you for the Read!


  • blondone
    August 20, 2007

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    This is such a heartfelt poem deep emotions touching the soul, lovely flow and grand imagery really well written... soft and loving best of luck to you in this contest


  • Sandygram silver member
    August 19, 2007

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    Hi Tearz, This was such a beautiful and heartfelt poem. Your words are so full of love and emotion. I know how it feels to have someone you love in harms way over there. I thanked the Lord when my dear friend came back home. Your poem has touched my heart. Best of luck in the contest. I do think this deserves the Gold. Sandy

    Blessings


  • MuddyKing
    August 18, 2007

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    excellence is rare

    this is excellent...beautiful language of love and caring...it has an edge yet the softness from within overflows
    we share many of the same wishes kind lady

    best wishes
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • Dead Star--x
    August 18, 2007

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    i really love what youve done with this
    i was hoping someone would stumble across the words and key in on them to make this thanx & welcome to the finalists list
    good luck
    CureMyTragedy♥


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    wow..great images

    Hi tearz..Time is an awful thing to live within...so hard not to remember,cigarettes, help stress level so go for it,sadly written but good reminder of the war zones...good luck my friend...SH....

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    August 18, 2007

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    This is so heart-felt and sad. Such empathy and anguish for ALL -- an incredible write. Good luck in this contest.

    Lady D

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