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Dancing To Emptiness - HM

Missing image
In the dark
with my enemy

I dance

black memories crowd my steps

sound of him directs my rhythm

I spin

until all of him flings far

spun empty, I can go to king-sized dreams
of something other than loss.

Author notes

prompt - Emptiness Dancing

jpg - judgment - deviant artist, Yori

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  • Gwenevere
    August 20, 2007
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    Well done on you HM, Ros


  • LadyLavender gold member
    August 20, 2007
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    incredible! I humbly bow to thee. Smile! One of the best poems I've ever read.


  • Frozentearz
    August 19, 2007

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    Well great to see you back and with such power behind your words Pow-wow left you closer to self
    Thanks for sharing,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      August 20, 2007
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      a two month rest but the mind does not stop...ever... ah, no rest for the wicked...lol.


  • Gwenevere
    August 19, 2007
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    A short but excellent peice.Once more you excel.Well done and good luck, Ros


  • maa gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    your poem left me breathless - and speechless ...
    while I was reading, I felt fear coming up in me from the well of darkness ... I almost got drowned in the images that suddenly emerged from the storehouse of my own memories ... I would have rather not seen them right now, but they were welcomed with serenity ... something tells me that you are a shaman or initiator or a wizzard ... somebody who does not fear the darkness and knows how to retrieve lost soul-parts from places and times of traumatic experiences ...

    a masterfully written poem that has pulled a sensitive string in me ...

    thank you so much,

    maa


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      August 20, 2007
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      ty maa. I am glad you run contests..and glad you know to judge with things that touch your heart.


  • Matt Holck
    August 18, 2007
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    My shoulders break frozen soil under the tip of my ploy


  • blondone
    August 18, 2007

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    Really a grandstand of imagery and flow and of the prompt best of luck to you I love this, until all of him flings far...

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