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weeping for willow

i open my eyes, not
to the sound of
your gentle engine
in my ear
kick starting my morning
as you pad upon my pillow
but my weeping,
weeping for the loss
of my willow

Author notes

lost my youngest cat willow yesterday morning. not able to write much at the moment still feeling to unhappy but hopefully will manage at some point to put on paper happy memories of him in his short life.

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  • Himitsu
    May 30

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    Remarkable metaphors and diction for such a short piece. You typed "i" instead of "I", but I suppose the letter is more important than the envelope. Poetically raw emotions make for a lethal combination. Thank you for your entry.


  • Age of Rain
    May 18, 2008
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    Awwww. You don't get very many poems about one's pets nowadays. And usually those aren't very good. But I have to say, your metaphor was pretty decent. A great relation between "engine" and "kick starting." The ending made me think back when I was five though. That's the only time I can remember weeping over an animal. Good work!

  • Existence
    November 19, 2007
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    When I first read the part that said "gentle engine", I was confused. But after reading your author's note, I fully comprehend the meaning of that. Very good description...I remember my own cat humming and breathing deep within his chest. It was a soothing sound. Touching poem. I am sorry for your lost.


  • discardedtears
    November 18, 2007
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    aww. my cat of 20 years died last christmas. you just made me cry. short but powerful


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    November 17, 2007

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    This was a great piece. I can really feel your pain. You painted a very vivid picture with your words.
    All and all a very enjoyable poem
    Well done.
    Keep up the good work.


  • Uhs Feth Malorn
    November 1, 2007
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    Weeping for Willow...what a beautiful title for a poem and what a terrible thing that your cat shall die. No matter what cynical people say, a cat is as much a person as a human is, and their departing is desperately sad. I lost one of my lovely cats five years ago and I still wish he was here. Absolutely lovely poem.

    xx


  • Tristan Storm
    October 17, 2007

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    I am very sorry for your loss. I must admire you for the beautiful lament for your beloved cat. Brilliant.

    Hugz
    Himler

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