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A Vignette for Dada

 

 

 

Every Saturday, Dada
made octopus punch
for sale on the beach
next day. I was

more a part of the juice
than tentacles; always

wondered why
he called it that. All
I remember:

rum-crushed
peanuts, condensed
milk, molasses, guiness
other 'mix-up mix-up'.


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One afternoon, he
threatened to
rub my salivary thumb
in fowl shit and sinkle bible.


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Sometimes
as penance, his veins
extended through a
piece of hose like
careful sucker thorns.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes


"sinkle bible" = aloe vera

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  • sheltered
    November 19, 2007

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    Seems i'm not the only one who can spell it light.
    Very airy. Like a little sinkle bible for the soul.


    • J.J. Sass
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you. I never did like it - way too bitter, though it did wonders as a facial cleanser!


  • Swan song gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    Wow this is a cool poem very different from the norm and a joy to read,


  • Jersene gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    excellent!


  • Peteskid gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    octopus punch, such wonderful pieces of memory here and the feelings are the main ingredient i think... PK


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    August 21, 2007
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    a contender for sure here, love this....


    al


  • Heart Sutra
    August 20, 2007
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    this is excellent!

    good luck in the contest honey!


  • NurseChilly gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    succulent and juicy to life itself..

    well done and good luck too...


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    Beautiful, nostalgic poetry - each vignette a gem of childhood and touch...

    ~ Nicolette


  • zillion
    August 18, 2007
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    Oh I love it. Absolutely brillant!


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    I don't mind an author's note containing a definition or small point of reference, I just want the poems to speak for themselves and this one certainly does... so you can keep the note on



  • Grunts Girl silver member
    August 18, 2007

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    i knew what sinkle bible was and i think i am a youngun' lol
    I adored part of the juice... that held me for the rest of the write..
    this was great

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