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Oh dear!

Rattled thoughts and mind is junky
I had a chuck, and it was chunky

Jeez my chest is really wheezy
And I'm feeling very queazy

Smokin' heaps is just so crazy
God, the room is getting hazy

Have eaten zilch, and feeling woozy
Drank too much and breath is boozy

Why'd I do it? Now I feel sick
I need a cure that's really quick

Boy my bed looks warm and cozy
So off to it I will mosey

Dream of bunnies, warm and fuzzy
And hope this rhyme impresses cuzzy

Author notes

junky 21
wheezy 24
queazy 27
crazy 19
woozy 20
zilch 19
boozy 19
quick 20
cozy 19
fuzzy 19

Total: 207

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  • sublimewriter
    August 27, 2007

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    what a great use of rhyme. there are several difficult words, which you use and write with ease, it seems


  • hopelessly-broken
    August 22, 2007

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    nawww.. that was awesome!!! very creative with the words you were given!!

    keep up the amazing writting AP mum
    xoxoxoxoxoxox


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    August 20, 2007

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    such a great rhyming stragedy you have. i am impressed and wish you well in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • LAPoe gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    I don't know about impressing cuzzy.. but you
    sure impressed me... Great work Julie, on
    Miss Buddy's scrabble word challenge!!!!!!
    Doc.


  • tawk gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    What great use of the Scrabble Word Bank. I so enjoyed your write. Wonderful rhyme and flow. Great imagery throughout. You brought a smile to my face have a great day


  • pearl-dragon
    August 19, 2007

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    Silly Billy Sister

    How many times have I told you - NEVER mix Tim Tams, Rissoles and Gravy and Lollygobble Bliss Bombs with your Bourbon and Coke
    I raise my to you sis...
    and best wishes in the contest

    love you sweetpea


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    August 19, 2007

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    Wow excellent write How often have we been there! You've used some high point letters in this. Love the whole thing and the flow rhyme and rgythm!
    All the best in the contest
    Gaylene


  • Recluse Writer gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    To my Boozy woozy crazy wheezy cuzzy

    MWAH from fuzzy crazy cuzzy


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    August 18, 2007

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    Hahaha! Been there, done that! And, you gave yourself away at the end there, Cuz!

    Now, go get some sleep and stop all that smoking and drinking, it's bad for your health.

    Please add point values to words in author's notes so if you win I can quickly calculate your extra points. Thanks!


  • passim silver member
    August 18, 2007

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    Another gem Jules. It just proves that smaokin' an booze improves the mind. Well done chuck. Good luck, Oh that rhymes


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    ha ha this was awsome i love the rhyming couplet
    it made me chuckle
    a wonderful write
    well done and best of luck


  • Melodies
    August 18, 2007

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    You have written a darling rhyming poem!

    I love rhyming couplets and this poem is adorable! I had no idea you were using certain words until I read your notes.

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