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A Teaspoon and an Open Mind

Across the room, in your corner, I watch you dig at concrete floor.

At brick-lined walls with nails you scrabble, fingers torn, bloodied, raw.

Where two walls meet, my back is lent; my eyes trace your hopeless quest.

I offered help, I knew the way, but you scorned me, you knew best.

You weren’t to know, within my grasp, freedom’s key sat silver and thin.

But not by tiny, shoveled spoonfuls would my escape begin.

You once stole my spoon to chip at mortar, instead you chipped the bowl.

But subtler ways, to worlds beyond walls, exist than through a hole.

Convex, concave, oval mirror passed before my eyes, distorts light

In its depths, twisting, bending forms build me worlds of colours bright

My thoughts stretch wide; encompass plains furnished by dreams fantastical

Step through portals, senses alive, amongst shadows I recall.

I long to share my journey with you, on this path you'll never find.

But navigation requires a teaspoon…and an open mind...
 

Author notes

This poem is about fighting to escape the constraints life imposes.  Sometimes, an individual's existence feels like a prison cell which they are desperate to claw their way out of.  Often the outside world which we wish to escape will not allow it and it becomes necessary to create an inner world in which to be free.  The smallest, most insignificant 'real world' item (e.g. a teaspoon) can fire imagination to outshine the stars...so long as that imagination is given an open mind to roam free in.  This poem is an example of that.

 

IMAGINATION = FREEDOM 

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  • lianonsidhe silver member
    April 20, 2008

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    Wow, such wonderful imagery and teamed with crisp rhyme. I especially love the lines:
    'Across the room, in your corner, I watch you dig at concrete floor.'
    and
    'You once stole my spoon to chip at mortar, instead you chipped the bowl.'

    The sense of hoplessness as we watch someone falling yet have not the power to catch them, only the words of wisdom to help them be caught if they would but listen.
    Pure magic.


  • Yellow-Rose
    April 15, 2008

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    I really like this poem. I find it intriguing and gain more insight each time I re-read. I love the overall HOPE that ties the emotions together and I can see that each word means something so much deeper.

    'Convex, concave, oval mirror passed before my eyes, distorts light

    In its depths, twisting, bending forms build me worlds of colours bright

    My thoughts stretch wide; encompass plains furnished by dreams fantastical

    Step through portals, senses alive, amongst shadows I recall.

    I long to share my journey with you, on this path you'll never find.

    But navigation requires a teaspoon…and an open mind...'

    Thank you for giving me the image of a teaspoon and an open mind to use whenever I need navigating. Great poem. Thank you for your entry


  • Walk-Free
    January 2, 2008

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    Wow, this was interesting ;D

    Never quite read anything like this before, and you made it rhyme, which made me like it more.

    Great imagination you have there! Thanks and good luck ~


  • Tarja
    October 19, 2007

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    Thanks so much for this entry.... it really does the concept of imagination justice... I think Anne Shirley would say the same! Good luck!


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 30, 2007
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    Across the room, in your corner,
    I watch you dig at concrete floor.

    At brick-lined walls with nails you scrabble,
    fingers torn, bloodied, raw.

    Where two walls meet, my back is lent;
    my eyes trace your hopeless quest.



    doesn't this feel like what life dishes out at times

  • abba12
    August 29, 2007

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    I didn't entirely understand the poem but after reading your explanation and reading it back through it became very deep. I can't say this is my favourite of your poems, but as always it's well done. Thanks for entering, I love it!


  • Daizy21
    August 18, 2007
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    I think its ironic, because its supposed to be a teaspoon and a open mouth...wonderful metaphor for opening the mind and feeding it.Your use of metaphors are beautiful,its almost like there are many meanings to all that you say.Thank you for the beautiful poem.


  • Maldronah
    August 17, 2007

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    Fascinating. More feeling than story. Flows well but
    'reading the map' is a jog in the road. Interesting
    to see that you know the way but the other doesn't.


    • J.P.Troy
      August 18, 2007
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      reply to Maldronah

      Thanks for your feedback. I agree, 'reading the map' didn't work for me either. I hope I've corrected the problem and would like to know your opinion of my revision.
      JPT

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