burn the bridges that keep you away
burn the voices that won't go away
sever the ties between life and death
love yourself with every last breath
burn your anger and burn your fear
burn the passion whenever i'm near
break the bonds between love and hate
live your life, it's not too late
burn the faces that ruined your life
burn the blood once on the knife
stop the hurt and stop the pain
let go of the past, you've so much to gain
burn the lies that made you cry
burn all the reasons to say goodbye
sear the tears that used to fall
pick up the phone and answer hope's call
burn the lies
burn the fear
burn the pain
burn the tears
burn your anger
burn it all
burn it now....before you fall
regain a life
regain a hope
regain my love
you CAN cope
keep on living through it all
stay with me
answer loves true call
Author notes
it's about moving on...forgetting all the bad that has happened and living your life....recovering from all the pain and finding love
it's a personal poem
burning all the things that made you cry
and learning how to live your life
also atm it's about someone i love very much, who just won't open up, who is in the same place i was, depression and so forth and i just want to help them so much
hope and/or pride are the emotions meant to be put across in this piece
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Ah! My mistake! No mis spellings. I'm sorry! LOL, I have had a loooonnnnngggg day.
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Very inspirational and great rhyme. The words flow nicely together making this a great write.
Just the one mispelled word that I picked up on, I will come back to it again and hopefully you've edited.
This is truly a wonderful piece! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Pretty Good
severe -> sever (?) A possible spelling nit pick. I thought it was a great read, I hear that "burn it" put forward in counseling from time to time, as if to write a list and take it outside somewhere and burn it in effigy, so as to try and forget...or something. Thanks for the submission, and good luck in the contests (your personal one and mine). -
i really like this
i admire this poem!! no how much it hurts to move on.. kepp it up xx -
This is a lovely write of emotion thanks for entering and good luck.
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this is really really good. i like your style of writing in this.
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This is one of the many reasons I love to read your poetry. You add elements of hope to the darkness that surrounds us all on a daily basis. I enjoyed reading this immensely. You have a true talent!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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this...is...amazing. it hooked me on the first line. the rhyme reminds me of the style that i write in. it was a truely amazing. i particularly liked a few spots:
"burn the faces that ruined your life
burn the blood once on the knife"
"burn the lies
burn the fear
burn the pain
burn the tears
burn your anger
burn it all
burn it now....before you fall"
those where the ones that kinda jumped out at me. this has to be the best one i've read for a while!
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I feel like doing this so much with things in my life just to be able to let go and be free from all the pain. It would be a very long process and I would not really know where to begin. This is a very good write.
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