Forevermore joyful, happy and free, you and I Tory,
forgetting the past, the pain, heartbreak, we start our own story.
Lending strength and love to one another and we never doubt,
pushing away the negative, the meddlers so we branch out.
Cutting loose all the past, starting fresh again, we love anew,
knowing as we start this life together, that this love is true.
Logistics notwithstanding, what we have, is what we are due,
I praise our maker above for this is all to His glory.
Raising my eyes, my voice to Him above, I just have to shout,
pasting our love on all marquees, this is our new love's debut.
Author notes
Griswold: Picture #3
For you Tory.
CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme
The CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme, a form created by Laura Lamarca, consisting of one 10-lined stanza.
The rhyme scheme for this form is AABBCCCABC and a syllable count of each line is 15.
In a list
A contest entry
- Invite only...not all of my favs...but will be doing more depending on points so dont feel left out :D by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
300 points, ended August 22, 2007, 25 entries
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WOW, Amazing!!!
I love this piece, the rhyme, the words, the images, everything...
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
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This is so beautiful and so true. The poem fits well with your left images. Very enticing. Your whole poem feels like a snuggle in pleasants moments in renewal. There is nothing more exciting and rejuvenating than to forget the past and start again! God is the one who put two people together. I leave it to a loving Him to protect and take care in destiny. Lots of happy times in your poetry. When lovers are meant to be they accept change willingly. By letting go of the past, you influence the future more fully. Blessed and precious moments of joy in your poem. Thank you.
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a very joyful poem and an interesting new form for me to learn about. Thanks and good luck.
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Very nicely worded and use of the style.
Lady D
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oooo i love it!
its great....its sweet, its really an awsome form, and its saying amazing things...
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L3 has 14 syllables, maybe omit the comma and add "and"
L4 has only 14 too, omit 2nd comma and add "so"
Other than that, you have this form down very well.
A very well written piece that I'm sure Tory loves and an excellent take on the picture.
Thanks for using my form and for sharing it, hope you do well in the contest.
La x
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Thanks you Laura, I'll fix it right away. I'm crappy at counting syllables
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between your form and his love for me
this was a masterpiece. Indeed you are write dear one, Tory does love it as much as she loves him, well him more so. A wonderful light he is. Thank you for your kin dwords on thispiece
Tory
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aww tory is awsome...ive only just met her but she is awsome
i loved the dedication and how you got it from the picture
it was amazing and beautifully written with such emotion
a wonderful write well done
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Thanks for your kind words sweetie
Glad to k now someone thinks i awesome
He always does me justice.
Hugs
Tory
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First off; Thank You for introducing me to this fascinating form of Laura's. Next; you did a magnificent job with all the details of the form. Your rhyming is impeccable, and the contents all positive. Love is so grand when it is requited. It makes the heart thunder at an accelerated pace. Great job!
I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much LOVE ♥
Renee
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This is beautiful, I'm impressed! You did Laura's form justice. There's only a few of us that have done one. Bravo!
Love,
Amera ♥
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This is a tough form to get a handle on. 15 syllables is difficult to get used to, I just seem to think in 10
Must be those sonnets and shadow sonnets. Thanks Amera.
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a very sweet write. glad you found someone to love. well done.
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LUV it its so cute. i thought it was great and i loved the rhyme
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Hey for me???????Thats my border, thats my name, but hell no that aint me...wanna tell me where i am at lmao.
Well done hunney on this sweet dedication to love.
I loved it., Thanks as always for teaching me something new, that, umm you have way too many pictures of women that aren't me...where is my album at
I love you
Tory
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I'm really sorry honey, but the pictures I have of you AP would ban me for,
so I cant put them up darling Love You Tory...Scott
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