How crazy it is
that once again I am
enraptured
by such a force
Though I'm a bit queazy -
the sickness has entangled me again -
and my head is woozy,
my stomach empty and
my appearance blowzy,
there is a happiness welling up
inside my throat
Okay, so granted,
my movements are a bit jerky,
and my extremities are
somewhat quaky
I'm hungry and jumpy
and I've grown a bit schizy,
and I know
somewhere inside
that death is around the corner
but that's okay
because when they're at my exequy
they'll look down on frail little me
and say,
"So thin, baby girl,
so thin."
And I'll lay there cozey
in my warm, soft casket
and revel in the sharp, jagged edges
of bone on bone
and bone on flesh.
Author notes
Words I used:
crazy (19), queazy (27), woozy (20), blowzy (23), jerky (19), quaky (21), jumpy (19), schizy (23), exequy (25), cozey (19). Total points - 215
Sorry, this one really isn't happy. I hope it's a good read, though. Any suggestions? I'm open to criticism.
A contest entry
- The Scrabble Word Bank Challenge - Extra Scrabble Points for the Winners by Fairy Nutty Buddy.
600 points, ended August 25, 2007, 6 entries
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Wonderful piece thanks for yor entry
xo
Cyb -
I think it is great! Looks like I'm going to have to read, look up words, and then reread the poems so I can enjoy them after I know what all the words mean... haha...
You did a great job with the description of the thoughts of an anorexic girl. I find it very original and a good read.
Thank you so much for your entry!
One thing you gotta do is add the point values for the words in your author's notes, please, so if you win I can quickly calculate your extra points. Thanks!
Write on!
Kimberly G.
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Sorry about that! I added the point values next to the words, then calculated them in case you wanted me to do that as well.
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Haha! Calculating them is good. If you win, maybe I'll give you a extra point for "keeping score."
Thanks!
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You hoped correctly, it made a very good read. I enjoyd all the adjectives you used, and the fact that the poem itslef flowed very smoothly. Great Job!
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