quit it
stop it
your making me bleed
can't you hear me?
please stop i'm begging you
just go away and leave me be
i can do the same thing
your doing to me
all by myself
A contest entry
- [LoveAQuickie] by whiterabbit..
450 points, ended August 18, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by Melissa Gayle.
300 points, ended October 15, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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While I can appreciate your sentiment, this doesn't have a real solid punch to it.
Because it is shorter, I feel the wow factor needs to be a bit more in your face.
Just my opinions
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