I couldn't fall asleep, because time had fallen asleep as I was thinking about you. A sweet mellow memory beckoned to me into the folds of my eyelids. I couldn't think of anything more fond to do than to hold you somewhere deep within the depths of me.
I vividly recall every detail, color and emotion, which captivated me in your eyes.
I recall where we met, by the park, surrounded in a giddy multitude of blurry faces. Their faces were colorless when compared to you. Our evening class had finished, but the upbeat smile still lingered and the traces of connection still fresh upon our tired souls. We ran to the canopy of trees, surrounded by a drizzle crying from storm clouds which devour starry sky.
It was several weeks later before I got to know you. Walking on pastures through trees, passing by you where my whimsical muse rests; I came to know you for your mesmerizing charisma- caught in such an idle trance.
Autumn faded.
Like our picnics between class, spilling over poetry and comparing homework as we rested on old dusty chairs forgotten in an empty room; like a corpse resting within an historical apothecary. So deeply are our minds connected in mutual gazes of understanding. No, I couldn't look away. So excited, so enthralled by what you had shared with me.
You're right in front of me and I want to talk to you, but I can't find the words to say. Forget it. I see your smile; the vibrant eyes lighting up that I always remember. I won't forget you. I know this for sure. Staring at pictures unframed on my wall. I didn't realize- how much I miss you
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wow this is just amazing...it hooked me with the first line and it filled me with such emotion...it was beautifull inso many different ways....words fail me...
well done and good luck in my contest -
A wonderful write. Heart numbing imagery.
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Bittersweet Memories of............
times in our youth. I can still feel the bittersweet nostalgia yet I revisit them often. I mix the jobs of painful memories with the amazing feeling of re-experiencing youth and the unexplainable rush of young love. It is truly bittersweet. We never ever really forget our past loves, but th first true love...well it lives on inside of us and Ithink sometimes we wait for that feeling again before we give our hearts to another!!!Thanks for provoking this thought in me and sending me on yet another journey into the past!!!~~Toni~~
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I like this one. I skimmed through 2 others, but this caught my attention.
At first it seems like almost lovers, platonic or not. But towards the end it feels more like unrequited love. Whatever the meaning behind your words, they are beautiful and optimistic. -
a wonderful write it was vivid in thought and feeling and it made me think alot
it was beautifully written
well done and best of luck
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