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Red Moon Rising

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Red Moon Rising

Flower from the land of the rising sun,
lost in the garden where the plum trees grow.
She waits for her love when the day is done,
with raven black hair held back with a bow.

Her plum blossom skin is as soft as silk;
she’s waited so long and kept herself pure.
Her painted white face is like mothers’ milk.
An Asian beauty with charming demure.

Beneath the red moon, she longs for his love,
kimono falls from her shoulder with grace.
Lifting her heart like the flight of a dove,
lost in the spell, as his lips touch her face.

The war is over, no reason to fight,
he took her away on their wedding night.

 

 

 

 

 

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English Sonnet

 

Art by: cherrychai

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 11

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    Ah, niece..as charming as you! This sonnet of the oriental flavor has such an original romantic air to it...It is absolutely magnificent and you have done wonderfully with the unique prompt!

  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 26

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    Oh, how lovely, and a perfect sonnet, too. Grace and story all in one. A wonderful read; I am so glad I clicked.


  • balenciaga silver member
    October 25
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    i like this .

  • mystic
    October 25
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    amazing!!!

    really uplifting,romantic and hopefull....

    Keep it up


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 25
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    Good god

    This is so outstandingly beautiful! wow!! well deserved gold.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 25
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    What a silky smooth stunner you are here dear! This is soft and so very beautiful!

  • csmmoms2
    October 25
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    Stunning

    Your poem flows like a song in the waves. It creases the brow just so. Soft as silk...mother's milk and she kept herself. Hmmm lovely.

    I saw the "blood moon" only once and it took my breath away.

  • csmmoms2
    October 25
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    Stunning

    Your poem flows like a song in the waves. It creases the brow just so. Soft as silk...mother's milk and she kept herself. Hmmm lovely.

    I saw the "blood moon" only once and it took my breath away.

  • csmmoms2
    October 25

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    Stunning

    Your poem flows like a song in the waves. It creases the brow just so. Soft as silk...mother's milk and she kept herself. Hmmm lovely.

    I saw the "blood moon" only once and it took my breath away.


  • notorious
    October 24
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    A sonnet success.

  • Shayla Walker
    October 24
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    Wow how romantic.


  • Crystaltears
    October 24
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    wow.. that was beautiful...


  • blueyez
    October 24

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    Simply divine!!! That's all I can say. Anything I could say about this masterpiece has already been said lol!!! You're amazing Amera!
    Peace and Love always

  • Topnotchsy
    October 24

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    This is beautiful. Don't really know what I can add to the comments already made. The rhyming and rhythm is impeccable and the images are stunning. Congrats on the well deserved trophies for this piece.


  • melphleg gold member
    October 24

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    It is no wonder that this won gold. It is beautiful. It is a delightful love story in a sonnet. I love the stanza declaring her purity and waiting. How that virtue and value is lost in modern society. I am glad to see it promoted in a poem.


  • anaisnais
    February 8
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    Truly beautiful - deserved winner!


  • kvwriter silver member
    February 5

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    Wonderful. Brevity speaks volumes about the human heart and love. Very touching--a write that can absolutely melt the heart of anyone I know. Enjoyed. Congrats on the trophy. Pen on, Poetess. Best to you on the journey.--Kel

  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    February 1

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    There isn't much I can say that Jeff hasn't said, but I must add my congratulations on getting the gold and add that your sonnet is simply amazing.

    Thank you for this beautiful entry.

    Love
    Sue


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 29

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    If you have ever written a better poem, I have missed it. This could melt the heart of a fossil. It gets better and better on every reading. The standards you have set throughout the series are unbelievable and this caps the lot. Running the contests has been worth it for both Sue and I just for getting to know you and some other amazing poets and their poems a whole lot better. When I told you some time ago that I had spent years trying to write a half decent sonnet, what I really meant was I would have happily spent all 49 I have to give to write this one. Move over Bill, this is the standard by which sonnets are now to be judged.
    Simply your best poem of all.
    Jeff and Sue


  • Cinnarry gold member
    January 29
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    Congratulations sweet girl!


  • Legend silver member
    January 29
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    Congratulations on the worthy gold award Excellent

  • HeavensDaughter
    January 29
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    Beautiful poem. I love the flow and the picture it creates as I read it. Very tender and touching.


  • RuthKephart
    January 29
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    Beautiful...congratulations on the gold
    Ruth

  • Nangaleema
    January 28
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    This paints a lovely picture and flows very well. I like this. - NANGALEEMA


  • CherryKiss
    January 28

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    Wow, amazing piece of talent! Your words flow so softly and you rhyme like it comes so naturally to you. Very well done!

  • Legend silver member
    January 22
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    A beautiful sonnet and a pleasure to read Thank you

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    January 21

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    This is better ...

    than anything I've ever seen you write. It's almost haikuish in its imagery but it works on its own level remarkably well.


  • Sekhmet Kitty
    January 21

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    I really like this! It rhymes sensationally and it tells such a beautiful story. Great describing, could really see who you were talking about.
    Great!


  • Desire gold member
    August 21, 2007

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    Wow!!


    Whoa~ an English Sonnet
    Holy Moly~
    ~*~
    Her painted white face is like mothers’ milk.
    An Asian beauty with charming demure.

    Lifting her heart like the flight of a dove,
    lost in the spell, as his lips touch her face.
    ~*~

    Wow~ Loved this!!
    You are so good at these forms
    Appreciate You Beautiful!!
    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Soulful Woman gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    My sweet friend this was so stunningly written. It just flowed with such a soft touch and just captured me. Just beautiful. I love the way you write.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Soulful Woman


  • Swan song gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    Once again Angel face you blow me away with your silky smooth talent. I watched a movie called memories of a Geisha and this poem brought me back to that movie because it was a good movie and this was a great poem.


    • Amera gold member
      August 18, 2007
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      Thanks Jeff, I thought of the same movie; “Memoirs of a Geisha” when writing this piece. The photo just reminded me of it.

      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • poetryality silver member
    August 18, 2007

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    This is indeed a work of art. I tag along with all that has already been said. There is a quiet beauty to these words that engulf the reader. This is truly exquisite! Sorry that I haven't been 'round more often. I come here with great intentions and get distracted easily. Your work is elegant. I wish you much success in the challenge. This has to place. Gold would be perfect!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Griswold silver member
    August 18, 2007

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    Beautifully done as usual Amera dear, you are just simply amazing. The best poet that I have ever run across. I'm in awe of you...Scott


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      August 18, 2007
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      indeed she is.
      Always something sweet to spread
      Have agreat night
      I am heading off here.
      Tory

  • captain howdy
    August 17, 2007
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    This gave me goosebumps it was so simple and beautiful!


  • Antar
    August 17, 2007

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    beautifully worded, I enjoyed the imagery and the cascade of such rhymes. Thanks for sharing...

    Ali


  • micol gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    Nice blend of Eastern tone and Western form. The two merge with the seamlessness of a painted silk screen. Well done.

    (Note: should it be "plum skin" in line 5?)

  • PoetsAngel
    August 17, 2007

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    Simply beautiful, this had taken my breath away All hail the form Queen.

    Cathy


  • Allan Emery silver member
    August 17, 2007

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    Ah so! You once again shine your mastery of the sonnet at us. Thank you, my princess. The rhythm and the meter are divine. The image is stunning. What more can I say? It's you.


  • Marctheman
    August 17, 2007

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    amara you are truely great at using words that make the heart bleed, this is a great love poem. you are the best

    good luck in the contest


  • Whoochi gold member
    August 17, 2007
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    Gorgeous, sensual like you DOLLFACE...good luck!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    Ahhhhhhh, Amera, this was so romantic a write to me, I have always loved Orientals....uhhh...a lot I guess! LOL! Cathy is part Oriental, comes out n her eyes and face, Jet black, raven hair, long and beautiful dark eyes. She moved to Seattle to work for Boieng but will be here next week and I've got lunch with her on the 20th, or is it the 21st and dinner on the 24th. She is the one that had the abusive husband a while back///no longer.....bastard.She's only 34, a young un, but sweet as they come. But yeah, this write, its right up my alley emotion wise.....a LOT!



    dad


  • Laura
    August 17, 2007

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    wow this is amazing i dont think any words i can say can give this its deserves well done once again you truly talented poet xxxx


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    Excellent,

    Wow teach, you truly rock, and ya know I just adore the grace you write with. You captivate me with your imagery, story-line, and such potent love... Thanks for sharing you, and all the best in all you do, wonderful flow my friend..

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver

  • Arzab
    August 17, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Lots of passion in this piece. Beautiful imagery, too. I love the title. It reminded me of the sun on the Japan flag. This is my favorite poem by you so far. Good luck in the contest.


  • bedovich
    August 17, 2007
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    so lovely i like it loadss sis im gonna bookmark this right away

  • bedovich
    August 17, 2007

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    wowwww sis this is so gooood i like it loadssssss im bookmarking it

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