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Girl, I like you like that

You may halt me

  stop me at my right to exist

make your foot unmoveable

  but don't give me any other shit

 

Love has never been a

 disease

nor will it ever be in my book

  Love isn't just a teenage hardship

Once you feel it, you're hooked

 

Like a drug, like coffee

  put any metaphor for it, you'll probably be right

Love is everything and everyone

    Not just who you sleep with at night

 

Dose it really matter

  if i love a girl or boy,

And if it does, I want a reason why

Personally, i thought, we needed more love in the world

 

I guess that's just another lie 

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  • JustBreathe
    August 18, 2007

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    Strong voice ... seeking freedom to love and be loved on your own terms. "Love is everything and everyone
    Not just who you sleep with at night"

    Thank you for sharing this one. Enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest! ....JustBreathe


  • LadyAmalthea
    August 17, 2007
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    Ahh. So true. Everybody needs some love. I find it gets harder to give somehow. Like I just want to go throw mine out there to everyone I see, like why are people so uptight? I need to find somewhere with dancing and music and sleeping on the beach where I can love free and be free.

    o.0 <3


    • EatYourSunlight
      August 18, 2007
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      thanks =D i like that idea of sleeping on the beach i'd love to do that hahah


  • MicroFatCat
    August 17, 2007

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    'put any metaphor for it, you'll probably be right' is an excellent desciption, love it

    When you said hault, did you mean halt? Otherwise very good, but a spellchecker is your friend

    Jane xx

    • EatYourSunlight
      August 17, 2007
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      oh I know about spell check but it wasn't working for me at all..so thanks !


  • edit my world.
    August 17, 2007

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    i like it.. a spelling error 'Dose-Does'
    but besides that it was really good. nice work and good luck in the contest


  • HorrorFiend
    August 17, 2007

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    Wow..

    This was awesome. I don't know how to explain it but in rhyming poems you can always kind of see what's coming, and you were able to escape that with this. I really enjoy your style as well.


  • Silvos. silver member
    August 17, 2007

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    Wow!

    Flowed very smoothly, Great Work! I loved reading this one, prolly the best one so far today. Keep up the Great Work!

    -Chris

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