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Jade Dragon Poet

I'm a Jade Dragon poet for now
And why is this?You ask How?
My work is undoing my scales
You see the inner me in these tales
The words from my pencil burn hot from my breath

Sputtering fire into your heart,  unlike the rest

Your mind is spellbound with my reads

The Meanings planting a seed

Trying to steal my jewels of jade

Your mind does raid

When you finish my poems the princess is saved

And you may again read the same and a new path may be paved

Because you can't deny my tantalizing dragon eyes

For here is only truth, no stretched out lies

This burned up heart and mental state

Never in turn try to recalculate

Only protect what is left

And that is what a dragon does best

That's why my Magical writing is sure to emotionally illustrate

My plan is to keep you, I simply captivate  

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  • DancingRed
    August 23, 2007

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    Nicely done. I'm not too keen on the rhyme as it seems a little choppy if you ask me -- perhaps the number of syllables in each line could have been the same, or at least closer.
    But I've very much enjoyed the well-thought metaphors in this piece; the heart of this piece is fiery & powerful.
    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


    • Beverlynohime
      August 23, 2007
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      Thank you.
      Sorry...I always use rhyme...well...most of the time..lol


  • She burns
    August 17, 2007

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    Her anthem and her star inside that shines, smiles and always believe through all of the things you do...Her heart with wings

    Bush whackers,
    Antonio


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    'jikes' such  a deep write here young woman..methinks its your best...spluttered straight from the 'dragons breath'..brilliant,,and best of luck..a winnerCool

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