Look deep inside
with nothing to hide.
What do you find
in the crevices of the mind?
Deep sultry hues
inspired by a muse;
hopes and dreams
lined up in teams,
ready for action,
or controlled by a faction;
uncontrolled imagination
waiting to spread satisfaction;
creativity waiting to charge,
to live life large?
Look deep inside
and no longer hide
the treasures you store.
Let the light shine through the open door.
Let the world find you soul baring
ready for your turn--sharing.
Words come alive when answered in kind.
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Seek or Hide ???...
Life is just a game of chance;
the choices you decide,
Do you walk with sorrow’s mate
or do you stroll with pride?
Abstinence will bring you peace
this cannot be denied,
Try to seek what feeds your soul
so you won’t have to hide!
© 2007 Joy A. Burki-Watson
From Shakespeare's The Tempest ...
"Alas, the storm is come again! my best way is to creep under his gaberdine; there is no other shelter hereabouts: “misery acquaints a man with strange bed-fellows.” I will here shroud till the dregs of the storm be past."
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Aha! You enhance with your poetry
and with the words of the bard,
lead the discussion onward...
"...Try to seek what feeds your soul..."
for without sustenance the spirit withers and dies...
Words being very acceptable sustenance!
Aesthete
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I share too much already. I need to pull it in a little, be a bit more reserved.
I certainly could use not only to see my positives, but to develop a few skills so that I have some positives to focus on.
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More reserved?
But that would have to be an entirely new persona!
I'm with Yem/Ima/Key staying just as they are!!!!!
Positives?
Where do I start?
Unique abiity to draw out and expand upon
the work of others for tres interesting commentary.
Distinctve, yet illusive, never-know-what-to-expect
style in both prose and peetry. At times outrageous,
at times profound, always of interest.
The most well-read person at AP, with uncanny ability
to build on referenced works, to bring past literature
to the fore in an enlightening manner
(Perhaps sometime Yem will reveal the backstory to
this storehouse of information, this obvious love
of the written word, of past characters created,
and for the pure joy of creating new characters.)
The list continues: excellent grammar, spellng,
construction---all the tools with which to create
both farce and serious modes.
Intelligence---no matter how hard the personalities
try to make light of this.
OK, that's enough, before all the heads blow up
simultaneously.
Aesthete
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The inner landscape can be frightening in the dark! All we need is a light to shine into the corners, and most of the fear dissipates. Sharing our inner insecurities, we find that we are more similar to each other than we thought. I like your graphic, is that art by you too?
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Sandal, this was an introductory piece
I wrote on another site, not focused on
poetry. I wanted to encourage readers
to see and recognize the strengths
within them. When I brought it over
here I was overwhemed with orders
to paint, and I had not yet started
posting my own drawings. This I found
in good old Photobucket!
"...we find that we are more similar
to each other than we thought..."
I appreciate your insight as you
share your thoughts.
Aesthete
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hmm, i never read this one before... i like the rhyme structure a lot, move the piece along quickly...
the subject matter is interesting, always a little difficult to push the door open wider.
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As a species, we do
tend to be protective
of what lies within!
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Very, very nice poem.
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Nice imagery and rhythm
Sometimes sharing can be very difficult, for fear of embaressment, or of pride, or stingyness, or for being the only one sharing ideas which are new, or creative. i read alot of meaning into this. loved it
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Thank you, 702, for yur careful reading.
It was written as my first piece on another site,
which was not dedicated to poetry, as an encouragement to others to share of themselves in poetic form, You picked up
on that theme, very perceptively, acknowledging how many find it difficult to express what they feel.
Thank for the visit,
Aesthete
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WOW the rhyme scheme was very inteligent well put together loved the end great read
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APPLAUSE APPLAUSE!
AESTHETE...OMG! THIS IS AMAZING
Look deep inside
with nothing to hide.
What do you find
in the crevices of the mind?
Deep sultry hues
inspired by a muse;
hopes and dreams
lined up in teams,
THIS EXPRESSES EXACTLY HOW I FEEL RIGHT NOW
IT IS AS IF I FOUND EXACTLY WHAT I WAS SUPPOSED TO FIND. AND A WHOLE NEW WORLS IS UNFOLDING!
THERE IS ANTICIPATION AND EXCITEMENT, IN MY LIFE ONCE AGAIN.
BRAVO
LOVE MOON
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Moony, from reading your words
I sensed, happily, that you indeed
were finding that "anticipation and excitement"
once again.
M-C
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