Damn! I think I may have left the chicken stock
Boiling away when I walked out for the door
I know I intended to turn down the crock
As he brashly pounded upon my front door
What is it he’s saying? He’s going to leave?
There’s something important he wants to convey
Says we’re breaking up for good, I do believe
Something about smothering, unable to stay
But what about the chicken, is it okay?
I know I should focus on why he’s upset
But my mind takes me back, drifts so far away
Why do I listen to continuing shit?
No, he’s been so sure, reliable, and kind
A white knight to my rescue, time after time
Now he’s blubbering on, I’m falling behind
Did I turn down the heat, after adding thyme?
My mind is a mess, as my heart breaks in two
I can’t concentrate on his words or his deeds
He is walking away, now what should I do
I think I’ll go back inside; add some bay leaves
Yes, I’ve a mission in life, to get through this mess
If I get the chicken right, I’ll deal with the rest
Author notes
Tear Drop
Okay - the expression on the pic is priceless. All I could see is the distracted look like "damn, I forgot something real important"...but there's more going on then that. What a crazy world we live in. Cheers.
A contest entry
- Tell me her story by His girl forever.
800 points, ended August 18, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Funny Really
I loved this poem it was really different and the insanity of our minds adrifting in so many areas of thoughts. Oh and that poor chicken. You made me laugh. Night in shining armor then a pain in the ass really. You did a fabulous job on this one and congradulations on your silver trophy. Wonderfully done. Thank you for sharing your gift with me and reading and commenting on my poems too.
Much Love
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Brilliant
My Dear Mike you sure know how to make a reader smile... this is such a delight to read & hope her chicken was done just right
... Always enjoy your writing for you are a great poet despite being a macho soldeir but then all men think of them as macho I***T lol ... it's good see a guy with open heart .... I can very well see this being a winner... great poem I love it... thanks for making me say CHEEZ Take Care Minoo
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LOL!
I started reading this and trying to figure out what the heck was going on with you... Then I saw it was a CONTEST poem and oh ho hoooo - so that's it! Good poem, Michael and funny! Yeah, she looks a little ditsy too. (I have days like that.)
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This is exclent! I like mainly because it's funny and at the sametime sad.... Yet I can also see my self doing something like this. Expecially since this sounds like my Guy:
No, he’s been so sure, reliable, and kind
A white knight to my rescue, time after time
Now he’s blubbering on, I’m falling behind
Again I love this poem Great Work
Koodles
Blessed be
Mystic
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Thanks for the comment and award. I am amazed since I did go for the funny side of life, but that is what I saw in the poem after all. I like your comment...lol, arn't we all falling behind at some point or another. Cheers.
Michael.
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Interesting write Michael. A different but amazing take on the picture. Sometimes it is very easy to overlook what is important in the big scheme of things. Black and white get murky and seem as you say Dayton gray.Quite differtent then what you usualy write. Great imagery. Great flow. Great Rhyme. Always nice to read your work. Hugs and Smile landing on runway 4. Blessings dear friend.Sandy
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