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When is My Turn?

I've
known you since 6th grade
living with these feelings that
will not fade. I remember during
P.E when it was blurted out and
you didn't seem to care. Was that
so my feelings could spared?

7th
grade came and there you were
in my same class, there goes me
being free at last. Something deep
down told me to let go and forget but
i knew that i couldn't..it'd just
be something i'd soon regret.

But
shortly i did move on to something
more of my standard i guess. He was
goofy, honest, and helped me when i
wasn't at my best. It seemed that you
moved on as well, and it just took
me i don't know a couple of months
to tell.

By
8th grade we both found
someone, or maybe i just settled on
him. But the chances of you and her
breaking apart were slim. We lost
touch then though i don't think we
noticed, and it was probably for the
best. Which was probably the reason
my love life was less stressed.

Summer
comes and i see your name
pop up into my friends request. I
lifted my head up high and asked "God,
is this some kind of test?" A friendship
was reunited once again, maybe just maybe
we can start what never began. But a slip
of reality smacks me in the face hard.

I
realize that you have caught me and my
feelings off guard. Freshman year has rolled
up and now I'm scared to death. Have you
found a new girl since we last talked,
i sit, wait , and hold my breath.

I
try and try to let it go. Keep trying
to hide and not let my true feelings show.
Till one night i finally broke down and said
what i did. Unleashing all these feelings that
i tried to keep hid. I was shocked and confused
when you told me that you liked me to.
I
secretly thought maybe i'd get to be with you.
Come to find out that it all was a lie or at least
it felt that way. I grew to find out that i never
should have told you the truth that day.

A
new girl every couple a weeks i pity her and you.
Maybe you wouldn't have to search if you just took
what was right in front of you. Maybe i've gone
crazy...or maybe i just need more to learn. But
i'm sick of asking my self when will i get a turn?

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  • DAMSELx
    August 5, 2008

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    "A friendship
    was reunited once again, maybe just maybe
    we can start what never began."

    "A
    new girl every couple a weeks i pity her and you.
    Maybe you wouldn't have to search if you just took
    what was right in front of you."

    My two favorite lines! I also love your closing and how it relates to your title. This is a piece that is very relatable. Thank you for your entry

    --DAMSELx


  • GypsyEyes
    December 21, 2007

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    congrats on the trophies. I LOVED the last stanza. So true, I often think about that for someone. They speak words of love but do you ever the chance to be with them? no. dang it. nice poem- made me think.


  • Live with a passion
    September 26, 2007
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    I agree with her (VVV) (<---That, is to specify pointing down btw) So I really really really like the feelings and Idea behind it b/c you've basically writen a many yeared situation of mine. But... I think the poem could yuse a bit of work, just the format is not great, and maybe try using more elements of poetry, Alliteration, metaphors, similes etc. I've been working on using those more too, and it's hard but in the end it does make the poems better.


    • edit my world.
      September 26, 2007
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      i wrote this out of anger lol believe it or not but im working on it riight now...it seems bland
      thankies for your comment


  • wolfcub
    September 11, 2007

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    Loads and loads of feeling but I really hate the layout. This rhymes - why write it in such a way that it is almost impossible to follow wihtout ruinging the flow for yourself?
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
    Katie


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    September 9, 2007

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    A very nice write and it fits my contest very nicely. this poem has so much feeling in it that I can't even begin to explain how nice I think it is. I wish you luck. Thanks for entering


  • the-gifted
    September 8, 2007

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    great write. thanks for sharing. i know this feeling all to well. it seems, that i have been there too. good luck in my contest.

  • bonniegurl42
    August 26, 2007
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    don't you hate that? where u like someone, they like you back, and yet they seem to look at every other person but you.
    gr.
    anyways, i loved this poem, not only because i can relate to it, but because it is about you and you just expressing how you feel and u presented it in a unique way. good job!


  • star girl
    August 22, 2007

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    Nicely written!This is very good.This reminds me of a friend i have when i first start reading it i was like is this hers,even at the end i thought that.u did a nice job.Keep up the good work.u r a finalist in my contest.


  • forbidden-colour
    August 21, 2007
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    Good job!
    (Y)
    Thanks for entering
    X


  • DeadlyTurnip
    August 19, 2007
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    This is really touching, sad because it's so realistic. Thank you for the entry!


  • whiterabbit.
    August 19, 2007
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    This is so sad, raw, realistic, and relatable. I really like this, great job.


  • KateMadness
    August 19, 2007

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    Touching.

    That was really sad. I'm going into my freshman year, and I one time liked a guy who did that too. I really like your poem; it's full of emotions and I like that about it. I didn't like how it was written down the page, but I understood it, so that counts! ^_^
    Great job; best of luck to you!

    • edit my world.
      August 19, 2007
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      lol i tried to write going across..and it looked a little funny..idk if i should center it..so im still working on presentation


  • Ephiphany
    August 18, 2007

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    Wow....so full of true emotions, I can feel this from start to finish. Wonderful entry, I want to thank you for entering.

    E


  • The-Phoenix
    August 16, 2007
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    I can feel your fear and hope all that the same time. Thank you for your entry.
    ~Phoenix


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    August 16, 2007

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    This reminds me of my first crush...she would call and write, after I moved away...sometimes it would be loving, but mostly she'd write and tell me of her latest victim...the pisser was when I turned 18, and got a B' Day card from her...at the bottom, I love you...P.S. I'm 6 months pragnent. And when he left, I was on the long distance line night after night, hearing her sobs, until she found....another...I did eventually move on...damn good verse here, poet...

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