It just dont seem right,
To see a funeral of the boy that was mine.
I lived my fairy tale for a few days there,
I didn't see this coming, it's a living nightmare.
It always was my dream to find someone like you,
But now you're gone, a chapter of my life is through.
The way you looked at me, was away noone looked before.
The way my heart felt beside you, it's now forever tore.
You left apart of you behind.
You never had a frown on, and you were always very kind.
When I was having a down day,
You always had the words to say.
You lifted me up for me to see,
That you weren't like my last three.
You've been the light to light my way,
Even on the darkest day.
John Hughes, I will miss you so,
But now I have to let you go!!
R.I.P John, Mike, And Brody (8-7-07)
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Emily
A contest entry
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So sad.
I'm real sorry for your loss.
This is a great write.
Thank you for entering sweetheart.
I hope things are getting easier day by day.
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you was always-was should be were
that you wasnt like my last three: Wasn't should be Weren't
Please fix this and use spell check. I couldnt even focus on this because i was looking for mistakes.
On another note, this is a sad, beautifully written piece. Im sorry about your friends that passed, and the fact that you wrote for them shows that you cared so much about them. I hope you and their families are coping with this.
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thanks
thanks for telling me of my mistakes, I'm not that great on grammer, so i probably make alot of mistakes on alot of my poetry. but thanks again for taking your time to point out my mistakes to me so i could fix them, and i did fix them! well ttyl!!
~x~Emily-x-
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this is really good i can see its from the heart
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thanks, it did come from the heart, its rele hard getting through the sadness of a death especially when its your friend, and it was rele hard on me to get through this on because it was not only one friend, it was 2 of my friends and my boyfriend, so it was hard for me to get through that, so i wrote poems and stuff, and its helping me get through all of this!!
well ttyl!!
~x~Emily-x-
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