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The Mysterious Footsteps

I stood there in the dark
My eyes fixed upon the dark shadows
And the sounds of footsteps

I stand grasping my watch
Fearing as my last moments of life fade away
And thinking of what may happen as this figure approaches me

And there it was
The point our eyes met, its was a fatal feeling
The figure came closer, the wood floors creaking with each step

Its two arms flew threw the air
And found a place on my shoulder
And just as it was about to kill me

My mom woke me up for school.

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  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    August 26, 2007

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    Wow what a dream that was! Have you had any dreams like this since? If so I hope they were a little less scarier. Your mom came just in time, God bless her.
    Anyway good poem. Thanks for sharing it.
    Brian


  • BeautifulFlame
    August 24, 2007

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    This was very scarey dream !
    You decribed it very well and i was much relived your mom woke you up!
    Great write!
    ~Lisa~


    • bragaly224
      August 24, 2007
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      Hey thanks! Sorry if it says 2 out of 5 stars. I meant 5 out of 5 lol. Good Luck, I will be choosing the top 3 for all categories tonight and then I will be choosing the winners. Check my page for updates!


  • whatamanycando
    August 20, 2007

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    it is nightmares that proceed to haunt you through the day, even though you may not know it. ever woken up to have a weird feeling that you cant describe, and you cant remember your dreams? this is a fine write, and an anticipating read. you are one with words, muy bueno.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 18, 2007
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    I have had dreams like this

    Great write! Good luck in the contest!
    Smile,
    Judy

  • Time focus on Me
    August 18, 2007

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    Very interesting

    And there it was
    The point our eyes met, its was a fatal feeling
    The figure came closer, the wood floors creaking with each step

    Its two arms flew threw the air
    And found a place on my shoulder
    And just as it was about to kill me

    My mom woke me up for school.
    U did a marvelous job on this whole poem, I enjoyed reading it and I enjoyed the last part it really stood out. Bravo poem and well written


  • Horseartist7
    August 17, 2007
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    Really great poem it reminds me of one of mine.

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