Written By Lisa Morris
Across the bluest ocean
On the shores of evermore
I met a fair haired maiden
Bearing scars from mankind's war
Hiding below the stench of death
Underneath a blood red sky
Moving through the unsound dark
A shadow in the night, so spry
Moving silently into safety
Against the odds she fought
Racing to free herself from enemy lines
Her emotions most distraught
They were a peaceful people
Full of love and pride
They wanted only spirituality
And what nature would provide
They attacked her village most viciously
With war fresh on their minds
Taking what they could from her people
And left mercy and kindness behind
They came with swords and horses
Greed within their veins
They burned down all their houses
And put them all in chains
She talked of pain and famine
She talked of disease and death
The story told to me that day
Made me gasp for every breath
Those days have all come to pass
The nightmares have gone to sleep
But the memories of all that used to be
Makes me hang my head and weep
I hope God will forgive us
For the shortcomings of all mankind
For even though God gave us eyes
We still act as if we're blind
Author notes
MAKE LOVE NOT WAR
Username darkestAngel68
Real Name/Nickname Lisa
Age:39
How long have you been on AP:about 1 year
Any published work (poetry) poetry.com
Favourite Genres/Categories (ie. Dark, Spiritual) ark, Love, pain, spiritual, christian
Favourite Forms (Senryu, Haiku, Etheree):I don't have a favorite
Freeverse or Rhyme: rhyme
Personality:kind,loving,happy,painful,healing
Acceptance to others opinions (do you respect others opinions on how you could improve your poetry):yes
Inspiration to write (why do you write poetry):to release feelings of sorrow, joy, pain, all feelings that the soul experiences.
Any other information you would like us to know:What I create are the words unspoken in my heart so, everything you read, is everything that is me.
A contest entry
- Satan's Embrace (The Serpent's Ring) by liquidmindforever.
1150 points, ended September 26, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Speak out! by Luna Argintie.
930 points, ended September 9, 2008, 205 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In A World of War( for older teens-adults) for the gore picture by Cari Cullen.
300 points, ended December 2, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is true. Flows really well and i really like everything about it! Best of luck to you in the contest! x
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true statement. This is very well rhymed and the flow works well also, well done
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I really enjoyed the situation that played out and it is quite compelling. I respect your commitment to form and for that I would suggest a bit of tightening up on the rythm, I personally get caught up on a few lines when reading it, but nothing that would really detract from the overall message. A very promising piece, thank you for entering.
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wow I really like this alot, good feeling and good intestions, kinda feel jealous but I think it's age that makes us bettter poets. Anyway, I enjoy the sence of what you said in this.
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I really like your poem... It reminds me to what happened when Cortez/Columbus came to the Americas and conquered the Natives. Also, it reminds me about how the British brought war in Africa's small villages in the Imperialism times...
Very nicely written... Gosh, it will be so hard for me to judge this contest... But I thank you for entering it...
Good luck.
Liana
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we sure are blind. couldn't see a bat if it hit us in the face. Well done, thanks for entering the contest.
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Thank you for entering SATAN'S EMBRACE
This piece touches me.
It is a nightmare...a horror story.
Love,
liquid -
this poem was really strongly written and i loved the way it flowed...good luck
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Brilliant words and a simple and powerful message!!
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This is an amazing write. War is a horrible thing started by a society of wanting things one way. Then when it becomes one way they still are not happy. Best Wishes.
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Loved It!
Very discriptive, I loved reading it!
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