painted beaches, sidewalk fodder
in a lane of memories
artist's canvas
large expanse of red veined black
close the lids to can of sorrow
walking forward, looking back
seeking the x-marked moment
treasure chest buried
in oblivious
hindsight path to
murmured whispers
grasping
reaching
to clasp sunsets
masked with a
tequila aftertaste
charred jewels clog
the sneak-a-toke
stuck in the back
of bedside table
drawer
disregarded caress
litter on the highway
traveled but unnavigated
begrudged the jealous
glove box-guarded map
submariners
are too cool
to use
mother's periscope
fresh squeezed
juice on the menu
eyesight goes
bifocal
vision clears
contemplate
the marmalade
A contest entry
- For top poets in "Poetic Challenge" round 5 (bonus round) by luckynsincere.
600 points, ended August 24, 2007, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow!
Powerful piece Sweet One and Holy Shindig~
what visuals
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
Loved this!!
Magnificent verse!
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Dearest Dk,
You rocked this!! Your lines are perfection, from beginning to the very end. I found this one of your better writes...
mmm...
am I the only one wanting a margarita and some sand between my toes??
GREAT WORK!!
Mel
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Hey there Diana ~
First off....well done....secondly...>>
*beachs*....should be...*beaches*
1st line Hun ~http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/beaches
Finally....a very kewl write!
Loved every place you took me in this piece ~
Loved the imagery....loved the scenic trip ~
This is nice, when you can make me squeeze into your
write alongside of you, while you pen your Art ~
Very nice job!
Good luck Hun ~
Bear ~
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Good job! It's been awhile since I've read your work; you've been scarce. I miss you. This is wonderful and sometimes we should walk away but sometimes tequila sunsets aren't all they seem. Interesting the large amount of white space below the poem; a lot like another poet here.
Love,
Sis ♥
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Damn gal, you do great work! Feel like two weeks on the Alcan highway?? All expenses paid?
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