Dearest sinews, resign to thee,
Come hither, now to stay with me,
Your worn thoughts ripe, your soul be torn,
Ne’er let your sinews be forlorn,
Paroxysms of your sinews glow,
With light o’ moon and breath on snow,
Take in to thine soulless heart,
A feeling doth bring near a part,
Thy tears have coursed to pitied folds,
Of your skin, dewy with your olds,
Your aching, barren eyes doth gleam,
Like yon river, like yon stream,
Anon, the timeless world continues,
Tugging harder upon thy sinews,
Thou be no more a frighten’d child,
Be more a martyr, reconciled,
Doth be thy martyr, for thy cause,
Thou needs to be in thy deep applause,
These tears which form within mine eyes,
Form too the heaven’s stage, and cries,
For longing with such deep desire,
Can form thy everlasting fire,
Keep thy sinews treasured nigh,
For thy spirit shalt remain on high,
Prithee, thy maid in sadness due,
Be thy martyr, be thy true,
For not thine conscience, for thine mind,
Truest to thyself thou wilst find,
These tears now flowing from mine eyes,
Are out to you, thou maid that cries,
Shield thy sinews from thy eve,
Thy pitied self, hath not deceive,
Deceive thee not, for thy shalt see,
That deception is a folly of thee,
Honest heart and honest shame,
Wilt give thee all in thy own name,
Forlorn thy sinews wilt not be,
For I shalt shield and protect thee,
Thy paroxysms of thy broken heart,
Wilt die without a bleeding part,
Take thy passion, and thy pain,
For within thy heart, thy truth remains,
Thy fearful sinews see thine eye,
For not a breath of symmetry,
In a list
A contest entry
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300 points, ended October 16, 2007, 7 entries
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Hi, nice poem, but sadly not a Shakespearean sonnet, Di
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This is such an amazing piece. Unfortunately in today's poetry much of the integrity in it is lost with the repetition of the same mundane words, and the lack of use of poetic devices and forms. Thank you for redeeming some of that integrity with this poem.
Happy New Year!
Thank you for entering and best wishes in the contest.
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This poem has one merit:
it has assiduously been worked at.
However, unless we are performing some ritual of writing 200 years ago in a metaphysical manner, the poem today amounts to little that is lasting.
I am sorry to say this because young people do use the tools of poetry very well, at times, but do not avail themselves of those tools that reinforce contemporaneity.
Lyndon.
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Seems a pity not to reward such eloquent classic language, because I thoroughly enjoyed it, but that’s because I’ve studied English literature. Perhaps you could enter it in a classic style contest in the near future.
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This is an intriging poem. I had to look up the meaning of some essential words, but then it became clear to me. Sinew = piece of tough fibrous tissue uniting muscle to bone. Paroxysm = fit of disease. Your word use reminded me of poetry from earlier times... Here and there I was a bit confused... Didn't know who was talking: either the sinew or the I person. I think, I am not competent enough to judge this poem thoroughly, therefore I will send the link of the poem to a friend, who might be interested to see this and comment on it.
Anna.
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Amazing write. I really like this piece. the flow is great and the imagrey is great also. well done
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The IMAGERY
great????
In what sense, do tell me. "great" is a big word. Great as Robert Frost's metaphors; the endearing and casual images of poet laureate of New York State, Billy Collins? -
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another words the way you describe each stanza.
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good write darling. i had to focus to try and understand the language, but hey, i got most of it. cant be doin too bad haha =] xxxx
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I think the love-slain maiden
had a case of supraventricular tachycardia with atrial fibrillations brought on by a highly nervous disposition. This would mess up the "sinews" of the heart.
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