What's wrong with you today.
It's nothing, I promise, ok?
Now listen to me I know you better than this.
Well your wrong my dear, I promise I'm bliss.
All I want is to hear what's wrong.
Uhg, here we go with the same damn song.
I worry about you, is that so bad.
Well I worry about you, that doesn't mean I'm sad.
I've known you for to long to know something's going on.
Are we just going to talk about this till dawn?
I love you girl, is that so horrible?
Only when it's making me miserable.
Please tell me, I just want to aid.
This conversation has become jade.
Please don't be like that.
Stop annoying gnat!
Hey wait
Too late
(love)
(hate)
Author notes
This is something that happend to a couple that are very dear to me, and I hope that they make it through, it kinda pains me to see something like this happen, I simpathise with both ends, it just seems to be that all good couples hit their rough times. I just hope this one makes it.
All's fair in love war and commenting
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Creative display of dialogue in the form of an amazing poem. You have captured a moment in time so handily. Well done, write on dear poet!
Dennis
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Hi! I know you! *pokes*
Anyways, I really love this. I could hear the conversation perfectly in my head. I made me sad, but I like it. Good job.
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I love the way you do this with two different people talking. It could be a bit difficult to read, but you make it obvious in the first line and so it does work. There is only one spelling mistake, yay!
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Man, that sucks.
Oops, that sounds mean.
The rhyming sounds a little forced,
but hey.
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This happens all the time with couples as it seems. The woman most of the time denys her feelings twards her caring man. Or it could be turned around. But still... I dont know why love affairs have to be so confusing and frustrating. But I can't complain. I do the same sometimes too. Great write. (:
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some times some thing's work there own way out...no matter ow much we try it..find's a way...hope they both be ok and great write.
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