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three stars fell with grace on ground
where hallowed words hailed,
spoken in tongue of trust~

i do believe,  he dotted line
and riddled notes in rhyme
to tune taught by papa

from ancient lap,  lifted by spirit
in oak cradled,  curved along breast

with strings attached,  acquired
from black lady he loved
who reciprocated respect;

blind to color,  creed
within dark world made light~

her walking stick woke the tired,
prodded solutions to problems
also ignored ignorance
outside in open air
who felt she should still be
seated in back of bus

and why she was possessed
by demons because disability
hindered ability to tell difference
between black and white

but i do believe,  she rocked
and hummed notes to nurture
spirit on ancient lap with love;

unimaginable sights are seen
through opened eyes even
when color not noticed
for everybody can ‘experience’
when mind decides to dream.


 

 

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  • MuddyKing
    September 20, 2007

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    this one holds true to so many of my own beliefs, and the line ancient lap repeated just did it for me..I love the full circle of this
    and the alliteration is subtle and so well done
    I have seen this dream, more than you know
    and I have a child that sees no color...like her daddy
    thanks for this
    this is a reason you are here

    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    "but i do believe, she rocked
    and hummed notes to nurture
    spirit on ancient lap with love"

    And you have sung her soulsong so well within these lines, Poet. A humbling piece, one that brings introspection to us all. Good luck in Muddy's contest. Wanda


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    Poetic passion to udnerstand...what words you ahve woven into a fine braid of knowing and udnerstanding...what it takes.. I do believe...


  • Swan song gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    The only thing I can do here is bow down and kiss the toes of your feet begging for more while chanting we are not worthy oh great poet Goddesse LOL Such a wonderful pen you have


  • Ethereal One gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    beautiful emotion

    You weave a beautiful lesson for all in this poem. I love the deeply spiritual mood you created here. I love the reference to her walking stick, and the whole 5th stanza is outstanding!!!

    Best wishes in the contest!

    Ethereal One


  • ms-cuddles
    August 16, 2007

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    Belief is Everything

    Powerful write you have here. this reminds me of one of my play grandmothers when I was a child {I'm still a child I swear}....lol She would gather us around and school us about following our dreams and the way we could make the world if only we didn't see color and never let anyone hold us back. Great write and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • HaleyMary
    August 16, 2007
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    Beautiful write. I liked the ending. It made me think of how important it is in life to have dreams. Without them we may as well not live. I think it's our dreams in life that can keep us going even when we're on our worst days. Good luck in the contest.


  • Sgt B
    August 16, 2007

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    Very eye opening.

    I never really understood what was the driving force behind bigotry. I never really fit "IN" with the so called "white" man anyway. But those who are bigots will one day answer for what they are. Great poem. Very deep!


  • wolfspiritguide gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    love this, just so perfect. if only all of us were 'handicapped' by only being able to see in only black and white, what a wonderful world this would become...

    great one here!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 16, 2007

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    Oh My
    this was beautiful

    I love this. love it. love it.

    I could here beautiful music playing.
    Wonderfully penned and that closing stanza Whoa
    pulled this together with tremendous effects


    delila


  • Cherokee
    August 16, 2007
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    "she rocked and hummed notes to nurture..." beautiful.


  • StarEyes
    August 16, 2007

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    Yes!!!!!! I do believe!!! Wow how strong are those three words? Well I tell you girl, you have taught me how to beleive in things I never thought possible! And it runs deep!

    This is amazing!! Best of luck to you in this contest!

    and much love

    Nettie


  • penman gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    Excellent

    Oh my precious. This was so amazing. Three stars were never brighter than when shining from your sweet words. Best of luck in the contest.

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