Salt tears flow,
End of lives.
Amidst sorrow,
Death thrives.
Please tell me what you think
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An enjoyable piece of poetry, death forever thirves, but so does life, there can not be one without the other, a good short poem.
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very cool poem
short and oh so sweet
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Sounds like a shooting at a college or school - so many of these have happened. Liked the rhyme in these few lines -
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interesting. The last two lines are very good.
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Point taken. I'm scared of death as well. Sorrow and tears.... Great piece!
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pretty. :]
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Wow, this really blows you away. The rhyme in it brings a nice little touch.
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Awesome congrads on the spotlight!
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good job
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wow. so short but very well written. great job!
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Short but powerful! You did an amazing job!
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Well done. Such power in just three lines. Indeed the last two lines says it all about life. "Admist sorrow,/ Death thrives. Iy does seem that in times of sorrow death does have the upper hand. The poem is dark and sad. I loved it.
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You are right. No matter how much we are hurt death always has its way
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succinct. not a word used in vanity, each one to good effect. i particularly like your use of 's' 't' sounds, great alliteration.
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You know what ? I think that this one is my all time favorite one of yours it sent me chills when I read it..just..wow...
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wow quick and powerful. hate to say it, but that is the way life goes. great impact.
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